I was so nervous omgggggggg. That was so amazing! Ooof. So many feels

I love this one. It is one of my favorites. While I love the way you set the scene and really built up intensity, my favorite thing is probably still Keith just being as stubborn as possible until the very last moment and pulling off a daring and extra dramatic rescue.

That hurts but it’s so good! I love it!

I really think more eps with Keith as leader would've been great. (I even feel like more were planned. Ah! I would love to see original story boards as an extra once the series is all out and they put it on dvd... but anyway!)

The sudden POV changes threw me off a little at times, but this was a great story idea!

Wow, Ziok is interesting. I hadn't thought about how far some of the Galrans may have gone with the robotic prosthetics, and that some of them of might be cyborg-ish ... A whole ship on Lance. Yikes. O_O Glad it was Keith who found him. 'Cause who else would've done something so crazy and (barely) saved both their lives? XP

Just so you know, I like how you write conversations Lance has with the others. First he tries to tease to cheer up Pidge, then becomes serious when she isn't at all amused. Heh. Then his conversation with Keith at the end - so good! The general vibe reminded me of how the two of them play off each other so well in 'Return to the Balmera'.

Nice work!

Awwwwww these two being brothers is like, one of my favourite things ;u;. Such good boyos.

Thanks for writing!

okAY im so sorry i keep spamming your inbox but oh my god this is so touching i cried twICE AND ONE OF THEM WAS FOR THE COMFORT AT THE END hudgafgdysuk like damn how do u manage that it was so touching and I have literally no idea when this was made (but ive kindof been stalking your account lol sorry i just love your writing so much) but just oh my goodness i feel like IVE been crushed by a ship at this because I'm just dying here.

yea okay thats just a wall of incoherent blabbering but long story short, your writing really is amazing. Like I know I've said it so many times before, but you really just convey feelings so well like I've said that exact sentence so many times but I just don't know how else to word it? It really is something I will never really get over. I cried twice in this story and once because of the COMFORT, which really surprised me like I actually cried from happiness over your writing omg the only other time I've done that is that part in Colour where Lance calls Keith his brother.

AAAAAAAAAAAAA im so sorry for spamming your inbox but your write so amazing thank you so much

my FEELINGS. FUCK. MY FEELINGS. oh my god. this was...oh my GOD. WOW. this was so emotional because it was so so so well written. it was so beautiful. holy mother of all things angsty. it was SO beautiful. the writing was GORGEOUS. I could feel EVERYTHING that Keith and Lance were feeling (and everything everyone else was feeling). that wouldn't have been possible if this wasn't written SO well and so in character. all of the dialogue was SO spot on. and not just from Keith and Lance, but from every character. wow. I mean, everything was in character. the dialogue, the point of views, the actions, everything. I feel like I should be pointing out the individual lines that I really loved, but it's so hard because I love it all so much. although, Keith's "I can't lose anyone else." really stuck with me. I was thinking about how much he hurt when he lost Shiro and it hurt me so bad. that line said so much. obviously, Keith isn't particularly expressive about his feelings, especially his negative ones, unless it's really bad. and I just...I love that connection so much. and when we got to see him talk about it later...damn I was breaking. wow. SO. GOOD. I just love how much it's reinforced in this fic that Keith is absolutely one hundred and ten thousand percent DETERMINED not to lose anyone else. and if he has to lose someone, he's going down with them. wow. it's such a powerful message and it's presented in such a perfect way. this fic was so perfect. I LOVE at the end when Lance is like, "Damn it Keith, that's even worse..." and calls him a hypocrite. WOW. feelingsmaximum. alkjdfljfks. the whole idea of sacrifice is really important in shows about heroes, shows like this, but it's really hard to know exactly what the right thing to do is. I mean...I don't know if that makes any sense. but I just love the whole premise of this fic? so much? it's just...aghhhhh. it's so good. I love it so much. I love how desperate Lance is for everyone to get out of there. I love how he was relieved when he thought they were all safe. and I love how he was afraid of dying, but he was more afraid of his team dying. AHHHHH. I love how desperate Keith is to save Lance. he's so stubborn. I don't know exactly how it went, but I LOVE the line about Keith realizing Allura and the others have left and thinking about how he never would've done that because he's too stubborn. it makes perfect sense that Allura did leave. as we've seen in the show, she knows there are casualties of war and she's more willing to make the tough choices than any of the other Paladins. and she believed in Keith, of course. I love Pidge's line about being really mad if Lance doesn't make it out alive, because I can so see her doing that. I also love Hunk in this. I mean, how could you not? when the story said, "Mother Hen" to describe him I was like YES YES YES THAT IS HUNK THAT IS WHAT HE DESERVES. Hunk made me so happy in this fic. maybe he would act like that if it were Pidge in Lance's position, but I honestly don't think he would if it was anyone else. the relationship between Hunk and Lance is so special. I love when Lance tells Keith to tell Hunk how much he means to him and all that. I hear the line from your fic, "Disjointed Soul," in my head. "He really thinks the world of you, Hunk." WOW. FUCKING FEELINGS. wow. and Lance's line about Pidge, too. wow. I just...my heart was crying.

I love this fic so much. the writing is absolutely gorgeous. gorgeous gorgeous. you are VERY talented. and you have a gift for conveying emotion to make the reader feel exactly what you want them to feel, and more. everything describing Lance's physical pain was so good that I got nauseous, only because I hate blood and medical stuff a lot and I'm super squeamish, so having such a detailed picture in my head was gross for me personally. but it's a true testament to how well you write! I was absolutely ENTRANCED in this fic, just like last time. honestly, I didn't think it would happen again. not because of your writing, but just because it's hard for me to feel that way about anything I read. it doesn't happen that much. but it did here. I opened it up and I was HOOKED. I couldn't take my eyes off the screen. I did have to take a break for a period of time (not my choice, believe me), but within a few sentences, I was back to feeling like I did before, entranced and entirely engaged. I was so worried and anxious and I was DYING to see what happened next. I honestly thought they weren't gonna make it. I love your writing so much.

alright so two quick things before I finish. a) sorry I didn't really split my review up into paragraphs and make it easier to read this time. I just kinda smushed it all into a giant block of text. sorry. and b) I just want you to know that I read "Disjointed Soul" last week and I'm STILL thinking about it every day. I swear. at least once every day. I can't even put into words how much I loved that piece. I'm sure this one will be on my mind plenty, too. :)

have a great day!

We do not speak of that... thy is to sad

The irony in this, is that later on, Keith actually tries to sacrifice himself to save the others xD

I must say, this is so far my favourite of your one shots. The sheer hopelessness of the situation keeps you on the edge of your seat the entire time. You portrayed the feelings so well. I really didn’t see him getting crushed under the ship coming in the slightest. All in all, wonderful story. My thanks to the creator.

this was really tense, and angsty, but also beautifully written, especially the ending

Oh my god! The last thing I thought I would ever read is Lance being smush by a ship. But well I’m glad Keith recklessness saved the day and that they are both fine now. Thank you so much for writing this piece.

Wow, that was super tense! Good thing they've got those handy cryo pods!

i love this

I loved it