This was honestly a really interesting volume, and i love the tease of Norman Osborn becoming the Green Goblin. The story did have its ups and downs, like how some chapters weren't as interesting as the others, but overall it was really well made. 9/10, can't wait for Volume 2!

This was a nice transitional chapter from the Gang War arc, and i also love the relationship between Peter and Mary Jane. Great work, as always!

Really loved the Gang War arc, and wow i really didn't see that twist coming. Can't wait for future chapters!

Really love how you introduced Beetle and then The Rhino. Great work!

Another really intriguing chapter. I especially love the rivalry you are setting up with Kingpin and Silvermane, and that twist at the end was shocking. Keep writing great chapters!

Goddamn i love this series! Been reading it since Feb and i have to say that this gang war arc sounds super interesting! Can't wait for the assault on Fisk Tower! Please post more frequently!

I was always more of a fan of the webbing being more of Peter's own intellect than something the spider gave him. Gives him more legitimacy when it comes to his scientific side.

Concerning the writing itself. I find it a bit lacking in places. There are scant details and it is a bit stiff for the most part. It doesn't quite flow naturally. Stopping suddenly and shifting quickly enough that it is jarring.

A bit more insight on the thoughts of the characters and detail will go a long way to making this better.

Overall, not bad but could be a lot better. Good luck.

good job keep it up

speak of the devil and he shall appear also good job

Nice chapter. Keep up the good work.

So, afro-american, right? I did not watch Homecoming yet, so i have no idea about that Liz's character. I suppose I going to have to read and find out. I jus hope the she hook ups with Peter, as him getting together with MJ, would be a little too predictable.
Also, is Eddie (and Venom) going to appear on this fic? or any other non-Spiderman related character such as Nick Fury, Tony Stark, Punisher, Luke Cage, or the X-Men?

Nice start.
I have some questions: Are you basing this story on some canonical universo in particular, or it's set on your own original universo? Is Peter going to be paired with Liz? And what is the ethnicity of Liz in this story? Caucasian, latina, or afro-american?

This is pretty good so far can't give you writing advise cuz I'm pretty bad at it but I think writings hard and actually posting something is difficult so don't get discouraged.

You've got a knack for writing!

Great start into the world of fanfiction.
Loved the characterization, you can really tell that you understand the character.
:)

Try adding some more descriptive detail. It really helps set the scene.

I loved it. Can't wait to read more!