did I miss the part where Itzal actually mentioned 'what' his Devil fruit is or does?

This was great! The size of it surprised me, but it was full of fun and fights! We get to see more of the doc and his apprentice, a delinquent doctor indeed! He seems like fun, and there also seems to be a lot of redheads that will be joining the crew!

We get to see Crow and Raven, and they seem like really awesome folk. Wannabe Marines, are they? Hoo boi, once they learn that the people who helped them are criminals... I don't imagine it will go down well. Either way, this looks like an awesome duo!

This chapter was brilliant and a fantastic surprise! Well done my friend!

Hey! Good to see another chapter! When I saw this had updated my first thought was 'what the fuck?' before 'aw hell yeah!'. You were right, Bipo was disturbing, and why the Marines want him alive is, frankly, concerning…

For the second story, the boy sets off a volcanic eruption and the only thing you can say is 'whoops!?' Ha! I like this kid. It certainly shows just how far he's willing to go for science!

This was a nice surprise, and a great chapter! I thoroughly enjoyed it! I look forward to the next chapter, whenever it happens!

Did... did I forget to review? *Gasp!* Shame on me! Okay, so this chapter was amazing and awesome! The doctor dude was veeery suspicious! I am concerned. AND SUSPICIOUS! I see that Rob is determined to be in denial about the state of his injuries, whether or not he can recover from them fine on his own or he really just doesn't care, it is not good to leave something like that to chance. Plus it'll heal faster with help.

Poor Zarina, she and Francis are the only sane ones in the group! I wonder if this arc will be the one that makes them decide to stay. This'll be interesting! I love how she's the spokesperson of the group, always knowing what to say and how to say it, which makes it very easy to avoid unnecessary problems... up until Rob or Itzal (and now possibly Arabella) say something!

The mystery of the weapons shop in intriguing. I wonder what secrets lie in Logue Town, and why they would hide their best weapons! Is it the same weapons shop that Zoro went to? Eh, probably not, but still interesting. Something tells me Arabella is gonna stumble into an evil crime syndicate or deep dark secret of the island! I am hyped for mah girl!

Poor Francis, having to deal with Itzal's madness all on his own! Those two make a pretty cool pair though, and it's especially ironic since Itzal's a pirate and Francis an ex-Marine. I imagine that tidbit of info is gonna surprise people later on! I am so eager to see where this goes and how things turn out! This is a fantastic chapter! Well done!

Whoohoo! This is a good chapter, a few typos but nothing major. A few words swapped around here, a few punctuations there, easy enough to ignore and get what you were trying to say. I find Arabella's antics to be wonderful, and Zarina's response to them to be a source of great enjoyment.

Itzal and Rob are bros, ridiculous and inspiring. Seriously, I was grinning the whole time they were on screen. I wonder how Robs and Arabella's formal/official introduction is gonna go...

Francis, you're still in denial (So is Zarina but less so) and you know that you'll never escape! By the time you realise you've grown attached to these crazy people, it'll be too late!

As always, a wonderful read!

Finally catching up on this story, sorry it took me so long to write this review.

I really like the rest of the crew that you introduced so far, I really interested in Zarina so far.

Zeko did a great wound on Rob but Rob is really nonchalant about his gaping wound, I hope on the next town he could get proper stitching by a surgeon as it seems the stitches could come off anytime. I really like that Itzal's concern on his crewmate and also respect Rob's wishes, good captain.

Overall, a very solid and enjoyable chapter. Definitely looking forward to seeing the next chapter chapters and meet the other characters! Keep up the good work and have a nice day!

Woohoo! New chappie! Hell yeah! The dialogue was great, the interactions hilarious and wonderful, and the whole deal with Rob's injuries were really, really interesting. I wonder if it's a personal philosophy or just a personal quirk on his? Who knows? You knows!

I loved this chapter, I am adoring the Zarina and Arabella interactions here, and how quickly Zarina is getting used to Itzal and the others, I think she may actually forget to go off on her own, or at the very least make the choice to stay after she keeps getting dragged into all this mess. Same with Francis, I think after a while he'll go "They'll die without some common sense" and sticks around.

Rob is an enigma, simple yet complicated, and I love that. Especially his casual badassery, and his flagrant denial of serious injury. Itzal is a good captain, no doubt! Caring for but respecting the wishes of his crewmates. Nice!

I look forward to the next chapter, whenever that may be. Don't rush, and don't feel pressured! You're awesome!

Hahaha! I already feel sorry for Zarina, having to deal with my mad girl! I really, really, like how she's portrayed. Spot on! The fight scenes were awesome, and I think I love the dynamic between Francis and Zarina, siblings essentially. And they could be the tag-teamers of the crew! They work best together, and together they're nearly unstoppable! At least, that's the idea.

Itzal hasn't really gotten a major challenge, yet, has he? I hope he gets a really good fight soon. After some rest, he deserves a little after this. I do wonder about the significance of this Slaver Group, if there is any. But if someone important from your First Mate's past is involved... hm...

I will add that there is... some confusing bits of writing. Some things seem to be skipped, like the introduction of Ruin (We don't learn his name, it's just thrown in there) and there are a few hiccups. Beyond that, it's brilliant. I was giggling through the whole thing.

Keep up the good work!

I am taking it as Rob's dad is a bad guy. Makes things so interesting with him. and fight scenes next chapter! Should be an interesting chapter next one. Good chapter and looking forward to your next one.

Le gasp! Yay! Update! Ha, I love the interactions and how clearly it seems Arabella is in the 'trouble-maker' part of the group. I can't wait to see her in action!

The others were, as usual, fabulous and I love their dynamics. Zarina's intuition is really something, and I love seeing how her mind works and how she logically comes to her conclusions (Poor girl is gonna have a hard time in the Grandline, but I'm sure she'll adapt).

Francis really can't catch a break, can he? He keeps getting dragged into everyone else's trouble. I am curious of his backstory and how he ended up in his situation before meeting Itzal.

Iztal is, of course, Itzal and clearly having the time of his life.

Red... we have some backstory. Fascinating, I wonder what kind of family he comes from, and now that we have a glimpse I am super keen on seeing where this leads us!

You may have a few spelling/grammar mistakes, but in the grand scheme (ha, grand) it's of little consequence and absolutely fabulous! This chapter brightened my morning, and I look forward to the next update. Keep up the awesome work my friend!

good chapter.
should be interesting to see what happens next.
I bet Rob found their bounty posters right?
that would be very interesting.

Ha! That's Brilliant! They meet in a restaurant, of all things. I'm almost worried about what Itzal is gonna do...

Rob kicking the collective asses of some slavers is interesting, though it's a shame he didn't take the bottle of alcohol with him. Just to pour salt in the wound, you know?

The whole window shopping scene was hilarious, they wanted to get so much stuff but they have no money, and poor Zarina and Francis don't know what to do! They haven't figured out where to go from here, or what to do, it seems they didn't plan beyond 'freedom'.

The whole story is brilliant, this chapter was fantastic and I look forward to the next one, whenever it may be. Keep up the good work!

Be wary of repetition of the word “he” especially in the first paragraph. It can get tiring for readers to read the same thing over and over again with no change.
Make sure that your dialogue gets its own paragraph, meaning that you need to press “enter” each time you’re finished with someone’s dialogue. Also make sure to keep the comma in the quotation marks as well.
If you need a beta, I am more than happy and qualified to help you. I used to be a tech comm major so I know how grammar works. Not all of it, but enough to make things look and sound better.

Hito hito no me model:Vulcan is the fruit I’m guessing.

Yes! A new chapter! I'm liking how this goes and oooohhhh Tear Island, I wonder what would happen there. Also, apologies that i have yet to send in my other OC yet but i got swamped with schoolwork. I'll try to get him done in time, though!