How can I say this without being needlessly offensive?
... ... ... Nope, I got nothing.
The most incomprehensible pile of garbage I've ever read in my life. I've no idea about the quality of the rest of your story because I couldn't even make it half way through your first chapter before I had a headache.

If you actually want people to read this, I suggest you go back and inject some narrative flow.

...My advice, don't write while drinking. Or high. Or both. This first chapter(?) was garbage. Yikes. A great example of go home and do it again.

Another crazy chapter

One hell of a first chapter, rather back-and-forth LOL

I like the idea of Alex mercer traveling through the multiverse but I could not understand most of what was on here.

Wow...this is terrible, good for anyone who perseveres and reads this mess

Jesus Christ that is hard to follow. Maybe less dialog more narration.

This was a rather pathetic chapter. What the fk was i reading i have no idea. A rather big pile of mashed up words and no context who and when is speaking during the WHOLE idiotic dialog of the first chapter.

From what little I could understand from this fustercluck, this will be a cool story, but, like I hinted at: it’s incredibly difficult to understand, to many “people” talking, to many different things being referred to. Sure, it’s interesting, but it’s hard to keep track of everything. Still reading though.

What a terrible first chapter

What is this? It reads like the conversation in a room full of schizophrenics on amphetamines.

so confusing

There is no build up.. everything is happening too fast

very hard to read.

Love the story!