Please Updte soon

The idea was good but you rushed into it.. and remember Harry is a 4th year and Fleur is an adult..
The whole thing is just not so believable and I know I know the whole Krum/Hermione thing but jk just used that for her ugly duckling transformation and to make Ron jealous/ foreshadow the feelings they will have.
Sorry for my bad English not my first language.
The story has a lot of promise but it needs to re reviewed and rewritten

So will this be continued? Hope this gets continued because you are a fantastic writer

Though the bait is rather obvious, I do like the idea of Daphne somehow joining Harry's (and Fleur's and Nym's) relationship. Mostly because my favorite "harem pairing" is Harry/Fleur/Daphne/Tonks. Maybe throw in a busty Susan if you're feeling particularly decadent.

The only issue I can see if that Nym is kiiiiinda an attention whore and kind of like to steal as much attention as she can. And it seems the relationship currently revolves around Fleur, in that Harry and Nym are desperate for any Fleur-action, but don't show anywhere near as much energy for each other (relatively speaking. They're definitely obviously interested in each other).

This annoys me a bit because Fleur painted the polygamy thing initially as "witches all with the same man", then does a "modern polyamory and feminism" thing by later insisting it's a "everyone together, but also one is a man".

The main issue here really is that if there's too many girls, Harry will get lost in the crowd as the girls might just end up gravitating towards each other more often than not because he's a single person and has shit to do re: trying not to get murdered. Yet you do like to focus on the sexual aspect a lot, which would increasingly have less "Harry percentage" as the number of girls grow. As far as my tastes go, I don't really prefer that. I like it more when the girls are definitely there for Harry specifically (so, polygamy) but also get along with each other and find each other attractive. What's currently going on is more that they're just as interested in each other as they are in Harry. Or maybe more so, really. Nym is a little obsessed with Fleur.

I'd think if Daphne joined, it would be because she's interested in Harry. This version of her seems sort of interesting in how... shy she seem like she might be? Instead of the typical "ice queen" bullshit. Anyway, between trying to thank him using his first name, and her reaction to finding out he has a girlfriend, it seems she might have a crush on him. It would be a bit of a leap to go from liking the guy (Harry) to also being equally interested in lesbian encounters with his other girlfriends. Even if they are very attractive.

Of course, you could also just make it so that only Fleur and Nym actually have any lesbian tendencies, and any other girls that join are solely there for Harry and only join in for an orgy on rare occasions (Like holidays and Harry's birthday maybe). There's no real need to try and force every girl to be bisexual in order to force them into the same mold you'd made for Fleur and Tonks.

Regardless, the story is moving at a fairly glacial speed between the lack of updates and how long this summer is dragging on for anyway. As a reader, I'd like to see things pick up and return to Hogwarts. I imagine part of the rut you mentioned before is boredom in dealing with this endless summer. I mean, it's been like 9 months or so since the last update. I know you're not dead seeing as you updated another story a month ago.

I'm glad this horcrux thing wasn't dragged out. It was fairly obvious (to the reader) what was up, so having this extend into the school year would have been irritating. For similar reasons for why I chose not to read a similar-ish story where Harry and the Order "kill" Voldemort at the ministry in the first chapter, only for evil goo to leave Voldemort and get absorbed by Ron. It's just... annoying. Reminds me of poorly written comic-related cartoons I would watch as a kid.

Hermione is the most annoying character in the entire Harry potter universe and your Hermione is worse than the canon Hermione either break Harry's friendship with her or make her grow up because she is fucking annoying

Seriously so defending himself in presence an auror now demands an enquiry of underage magic wow I have no words for your writing. Are u the same person who wrote the first few chapters because this ff is going down with each chapter. It is not canon neither the situation is so why are u trying to make everything so difficult for no reason.

Seriously life debts ? I don't remember u mentioning it when harry saved fluer from the cruatius curse. Harry also have saved Ginny and Hermione by that logic. Infact going by that logic Peter also owes harry a life debts. Why are u trying to spoil this ff with such things like life debts. It is really stupid to read

I don't know why but I am disappointed with the fights because they are not well choreographed. Also will harry ever become powerful? Because in the first few chapters it was mentioned harry is powerful, then after some chapter u mentioned Harry's power above average for his age and then after some chapter u mentioned it is respectable so I don't understand the tone change of your regarding Harry's power but whatever training he had it hardly looks like any improvement. He can't even take down a single death eater on his own so hardly any progress even after all the training. It was frustrating to read. When u involve so much training in an ff but the results hardly shows when it comes to real fighting.

I have read the fighting but I can't help feel disappointed with harry taking cover in every fight instead of dodging where one can easily convert his cover as an Animal by transfiguration yet harry does that didn't he learn anything after his duel with voldmert. This is things might looks small but it spoils the fun seeing how dumb harry actually appears to be.

Of all the bashing that exists in this fandom, Dumbledore bashing and James bashing seem to be the most ridiculous to me.

Dumbledore is supposed to be a genius (or near it) scholar who pioneered research in alchemy in collaboration with a quasi-immortal super alchemist, runs one of the (alleged) best schools of magic, as well as occupies two very important governmental positions, and he does it all while being a chill grandpa-type who passes out candy and dresses like a gay pimp. He's great. But just because "manipulative" is one of his character traits, people boil him down to a short-sighted, moronic schemer who can't do anything right and just exists to be rebelled against and thwarted.

It's practically character assassination. There's so much you can do with Dumbledore, but people discard all of his interesting qualities as if it were normal. They forget how cool Dumbledore was. Like, there were books where I definitely wanted to read more about him than boring, wimpy Harry Potter.

James bashing is bad mostly because they take him being a bully when he was a younger teen and conflate that to mean he will be a terrible person and a shit father to his only son. Which is made worse when it is specifically mentioned that the whole reason why Lily even married him was that he became more mature and stopped being a bullying ass. No, no, it must all be a trick. A lie to get into Lily's pants. James cannot be anything but an evil, selfish, bullying jackass who would absolutely abuse, neglect, or abandon Harry if given half a chance. (And, of course, Severus Snape is a prince among men and just needs a friend to reveal his hidden wonders.)

I just think it's hilarious and bad that people go out of their way to bash a dead person. Except in those cases where he lives, only to be a shit father for no apparent reason other than to give the writer an excuse to make Harry rebellious and edgy. I don't even particularly like James, and I think it's unfair.

I recently read a story where Harry's mom was secretly super wiccan and basically a genius, and was also secretly still super best friends with Snape (who was gay btw, and so was Bill, and Bill has a crush on him) before she died. James never truly matured and only got married to her because he tricked her into a contract where she'd give him a date in trade for a time turner she needed to keep up with her studies, and she could break things off and stop dating him whenever she wanted. But, gasp, there was invisible ink that made it turn into a betrothal contract where if they ever had sex she was forced to marry him or lose her magic. And so James and his friends purposely got her drunk not long after they graduated so she'd agree to sleeping with him, and surprise surprise she ended up pregnant with Harry in the process. And she was forced to marry a man she hated.

It's one of those stories where the writer very obviously has their own weird little social circle that believes in certain "alt" concepts and he or she can't help themselves but try and force it down everyone's throats. The excessive "wicca" stuff and making everyone gay or asexual-but-super-physically-affectionate, making James super rape-y, Dumbledore controlling people with compulsions and potions, etc. etc. etc. It's kind of a shit show.

Oh, and Harry is increasingly damaged, fragile, and broken every time the writer thinks up of a new thing to retcon into his past to make him more traumatized retroactively. Even though he also wants to portray Harry has being a hardened street kid. With knives. Like, both at the same time. It doesn't work. And Harry is also very physically affectionate with Bill and Charlie (the asexual in this story), and thinks sex is "icky". At least, so far. I'm more surprised that he hasn't thrown in "and he was raped as a child" yet. He's already had Harry rant at Dumbledore "I'm not your boy! I will not fuck you!"

I need to stop reading fan fiction again.

The problem with some writters of this Harry potter fan fiction site is that they make harry put of with so much shit of dusley in their ff. He can do magic not as weak and defenceless as he was before but yet he doesn't do anything to defend himself when venom slapped him. A person who can't even stand up to a muggles manages to stand up to voldmert is what is the most ridiculous thing that most of the writters write. Also going with the way venom slapped harry he must have been abused in his childhood and yet the dusley will get away with it. Hats off to these writter for sending such an amazing message through their ff that it is ok to abuse a child afterall you will get away with it. One more thing if harry wants to stay at diagonal ally then why he even do all the chores why he doesn't go to diagonal ally after arriving at the dusley straight away by calling the knight buss. But why will he do that afterall logic is something most writters lack here. Harry potter still the dusley's bitch no matter how powerful he get that is what most writter likes to write here.

Quit having Tonks hitting Harry for fuck sake

You better quit making Harry a fucking doormat with these two, you’re already on thin ice with Tonks hitting him (abuse already) in the shop, and keeping secrets from him no matter how small.

A great story so far that you have here and I honestly cannot wait to read more of it. Thank you