Reviews for Ben 10: Cold Winter's Night
JohanNishigami chapter 1 . 2/26
I already see a problem. Not only with the story's pacing. But also the plain idiotic dialogue.

I dunno about you. But I don't have an Uncle who would get after me for shouting at my family member for playing such a dumb joke on me AND destroying my belongings.

In fact. Anyone who would have been in the same room would attest to said child being punished.

It's odd that you decided to choose a Shakespeare play title for the chapter title. But I won't knock off the possibility of there being some sort of connection behind it.

But so far. I'm already setting low expectations. I've never met a gramps as childish as this one I'll say. even when watching the cartoon.
edeath756 chapter 4 . 1/14
you are a awesome writer I'm glad to read what you put on here
Kiarthros Toveke chapter 20 . 11/22/2019
Mark as complete?
TheAnalogKid chapter 17 . 8/30/2019
Great story! I liked the different approach you took to explaining Ben and Gwen’s relationship with each other and how it affects Ben on an emotional level when Gwen is not actively in his life. Well written, and thought out. Hope to see some more from you in the future.
Guest chapter 20 . 6/29/2019
That was great! Please do a bonus chapter.
Guest chapter 4 . 6/10/2019
Yo Ben have the omnitrix?
FrostyTheDragon chapter 1 . 6/12/2019
I'm with mike204 on this one. Is there going to be a sequal? Just my opinion, but I think that'd be a great place to introduce the Omnitrix and explore the impact on their lives/marriage. Either way, awesome story and keep up the amazing work!
Bchange chapter 1 . 4/9/2019
This was a title of a Shakespeare book was it not?
mike204 chapter 20 . 3/27/2019
could you do an epilogue or a sequel
Guest chapter 20 . 3/7/2019
I’ve never really been into fanfic. I’ve certainly never left any sort of comment or review, but I felt that this story was an exception. You’re clearly a rather talented writer with a good imagination. I really appreciated your ability to mostly avoid “lemon” scenes, and when you did write one, I thought it well written. I just spent about an hour and a half reading this, and I want to thank you for the good read. I probably would have finished sooner, but I had to pause a few times because I was getting anxious for the characters! Which is something that rarely happens to me with any story, long, short, published, or just some humble online author. I look forward to reading more of your work, and I wish you luck in your future endeavors!
zed chapter 10 . 1/27/2019
i have never read such shitty story my whole life
what's with the sadism? also you sucked all the fun out of the story the character ben here isn't ben 10, it's actually you in real life.
and where did the fucking Omnitrix go...
you made ben do ordinary shit like a shitty teenager and yeah about the parents factor,
no parent punishes an about to graduate teenager like that unless you live in South India or somewhere like that.
it sucked.
Guest chapter 20 . 1/23/2019
Make a sequel
xSean chapter 1 . 1/15/2019
Yep, definitely disappointed. One look at them snoozing and he is willing to go with it.

That being said I thought this was really good, only downer for me was the Family being so Accepting. I just don't think that happens, I know nothing of real world Incest Relations like this though so...

Thought it would've been a great additional bit of conflict where the Family is totally against it but learn to accept it over time after a lot of Character Building.

Would've liked to see Ben have an angry phase against Gwen to. He more or less made his intentions known towards the start and Gwen put a stop to it. Then kisses him and still tries to have it go nowhere. If it were me I'd be pissed cause it'd feel like she was tryna fuck with my head y'know?

Even with Gwen supressing her love for him the constant kisses, hand holding and shit, then stone walling him... Would honestly fuck me up lol.

Good Story, could've been better imo but was still really good!
xSean chapter 18 . 1/15/2019
So everyone is just accepting of the fact that they are commiting incest? Other than the Dad.

I felt like this could've been another great point of conflict for Ben and Gwen. I'm honestly a bit disappointed. Don't think many Parents would be so accepting of it. It is Incest after all.
xSean chapter 14 . 1/14/2019
So I've read up to this point so far and I gotta say this is fantastic. First Ben 10 Fic I've read funnily enough but yes, the struggles in their developing relationship is very entertaining to read. I am suprised that you haven't had them think about what their Family would think yet if they were to get together. It"s not normal for cousins to do so, maybe that will happen later? Gonna read on and find out!
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