You are the worst and now die

I see another one-shot with Sasuke being outside the village. I liked it better than the last one. Most of the paragraphs were able to convey the theme of family and loss fairly well.

Bar the small issues I already talked about, I believe your language usage has gotten fairly good, and you've been using words more carefully with each post. A couple of sentences can still be rewritten to maintain a good rhythm.

But those are the only negatives I can think of. The rest was clean, crisp, and concise. Overall, a very good attempt, and I expect to see more from you in the future.

Nice :D