Ok, I like this. Jaune is like a spartan, to the point, hates deceit and speaks letonic- short but witty.

A bit annoyed Jaune is the spartan, but ok. I do admit I look down on him.

Just binged all 6 chapters, here's to hoping you update soon. This is a fantastic read.

Please man, release the rewrite soon! This fic is awesome and has so much potential! It’s like the only good fanfiction I can find on the internet that actually involves ancient Spartans , and not immediately redirect me to a fic about halo spartans

I hope we get to see jaune spartan kick someone down a pit

I also think you should make Spartans use dust and steel, so they can become even more superior warriors, but I also suggest allowing them to advance as time progresses so they aren't lacking in technology, because Sparta is the best in war right? So why not make their technology advance as time progresses, because of them being the oldest kingdom. Well anyway make the king a OC and romance Glynda, that should help smooth out the story I think, but also the Spartans should ally themselves with the Faunus, because the Spartans are the only ones who actually show support and sympathy for them, plus their animal traits will make the Spartans even more superior as warriors. Also instead of world war three, you could also make it that the early civilizations of man, where over run by the grim, so they forced to go and live the bad lands forming Sparta. Anyway good story hope you can keep on writing, peace m8!

Keep it up m8, hope the PC will be good, and I think you should make a OCxGlynda instead of it being Jaune as king, also you could make it that when Spartans start their training at the age of 5-6 their aura's are unlocked so they can grow even stronger as warriors. So far good stuff, though I think the Spartans should ally themselves with Menagerie.

Grind her face to the floor and THEN make her pay for you computer. I really like the story, and it will be a shame if it has to be prolonged for far more than necessary. Regardless, good things come to those who wait, and wait, I shall.

Have you called the cops for destruction of property?
Id do so unless she is willing to pay for it

Thats a relief, and ita a good thing that i dont have the habit of removing those i followed

Damn man, tough luck, hope it all works out with you and your roommate

Y'know at that point, Jaune should have just walked away with Pyrrha and Glynda alongside him. Ozpin is arrogant enough to think that Sparta owes him, in front of the King no less. Also, why would the White Fang want to kill the King of Sparta, it's because of the former King that the Faunus even survived against Atlas? I say Jaune should just cut his losses and leave since Ozpin doesn't even have authority towards him.

Sorry to hear that. Hope things get better between ye two

The only advices i have for now are:1) No nuclear war,better volume 6's lore;2) The spartans have Aura and use it;3) An oc as the king/prince, instead of Jaune. Both cases, make him much less arrogant. And of course keep Arkos of possible. Keep up the good work and see you soon.

No problem man.