Awesome story

shield is an evil org they just do not know it ... how can they say they are protecting the world when they lie cheat steal kill kidnap imprison without cause and many more crimes. i found it funny in the movies when one of the heads of hydra hand picked fury to run shield because of how he is and he considers himself a good guy

Love it so far! And no, "not a happy camper" is not just used by people in New Zealand. I've lived in the US my whole life and I've definitely heard the phrase.

I would just like to give you a round of applause for being vegetarian, I have a friend whose one and I would like to congratulate you on your will power. I mean I tried to be a vegetarian for one week, dang it's hard. Well that's it, love the writing and way of details that you picked up from the book! Keep up the good work!

The phrase Happy camper is definitely not a phrase only people in New Zealand use I live in Canada and I have shirts that say that.

You need to change the title of this, because you've made Percy a bit... very defeatable. Seriously, not a single interaction has gone his way, and it's pissing me off. A lot.

Also there is quite a bit of bullcrap that he just lets go of. Fury would never... OK maybe he would schedule the kidnapping of a teenager, but Cap would fakking never go along with it. Especially on the pretext of "Orders", and nothing else. Natasha would. Clint would. Maybe not your iteration of Clint, though.

Also, fighting Percy on the beach? A Percy that's been through Tartarus and put many a TITAN into the ground? No way in hell Cap and Natasha could get past him. He literally has godly reflexes. I mean come on. In a straight hand-to-hand, I think both of them could probably overtake him individually, but add his sword and abilities? No. Just straight no.

Basically, you have a tendency to pair good story telling with Percy on his back foot. You need to balance satisfaction with frustration, and this story has ONLY built on my frustration. Hell, if you just make Percy react correctly to the truck load of bullshit that he's put up with, this would be better. He should be refusing to work with Fury - full stop (the man has completely disregarded Percy's rights, scared his mother, KIDNAPPED HIM, HIM. I mean gotdamn. People get mad. Percy should be just short of a murderous rampage, but nah. Just give Mace Windu what he wants, after all. his eyepatch is pretty cool. He should have earthquaked the building down on at least two separate occasions. He should have controlled the water in the truth serum to not affect his body. He should have created a hurricane on the beach when fighting Cap and Natasha. Jason should NOT have been the only person to try and save him. Things are happening because you want them to happen. Things need to happen because they make sense that they would happen.

Writing quality is good, dialogue is decent, character development is OK, and plot seems well thought out. You're not a terrible writer, but this story just raises my blood pressure. I hope my frustrated rant means something to you. Good luck, and let me know if you go back and edit anything, because I'm not going to read further otherwise.

Aye thanks for updating! Excited to read the other story

oh I think clit should not be a demigod it doesn't really make since

I thought Percy already knew the prophecy form the dream. since you are rewriting this story I think demigod blood would dilute any drugs making them less effective. also I like how you are putting Jason in this story so I would keep his involvement the same.

fish is not technically meat. also is a POV mean some point of view that means they would say "i, we me and so on you are writing in the third person

You just said percy will die. Im going to give you five second to run!

Hhhehehe JK!

Opossum, I knew that Fury was an ass, but he’s REALLY being an add with no proof to speak of.

*sarcasam*Fury makes a deal! Wow, fury NEVER makes a deal! as usual, great chapter :)

I like the name Mr eyepatch!

;b :)