Hmn...this story was intense and quite intruiging. I'm not sure if this is the absolute end but I loved the way you ended it, its very suspenful. I have to say I smiled at your descriptions of the kiss, it was beauftiful. Loved everything about the fic, short and sweet indeed. Very well written.

Ron! :D Ron are you a guy? Oh my goodness this is the first time I've seen a male write L/L fanfic! Rock on buddy. (If you're not, my bad) Alrighty, feedback, that's what you want to read. Got it. Kudos to you on proper grammer, spelling and sentence structure. The title's very appropriate. :)

To tell you honestly, I was reading along just fine, smiling at Lana's "whatever, this is Lex" attitude and how she didn't get pissed off. She's use to him here and Lex's mood swings are not uncommon. I like how you emphasized that 3 times. And then you lost me right about...here:

"I'm not in the mood to play one of your little games."

I got the sudden impression she was referring to something I didn't know about or haven't read. Lex suddenly turned strange and talked about noticing something. Am I not suppose to know what you're talking about because you'll explain in later on? I found it a little odd and teensy bit out of character for Lex to act that way around Lana. To go from one extreme-aloof-to another-sincere and passionate. I didn't know what the heck he was doing here. Hey, that's a good thing, your writing isn't predictable!

[She was used to Lex's mysterious ways and inexplicable motives, but the way he was acting now was chilling, spooky, off.]

Well written, great observation! Steamy kiss ooh la la and descriptive and nicely articulated. I loved how you didn't have them speak afterward. No words were necessary in that point in time. Is this a stand alone are you going to have several parts after this? Please, you MUST continue to write more. You can't just leave me hanging like this. Once again, fabulous work. These two are just sweet to read.