Please finish. I can't stand not being able to finish reading great storys. I want to know what hapens next. You got the gift man don't give up. ... kei x motoko is my fave pairing.

Yuri makes me freak. Really bad.

Seriously...

But Yaoi is fine. It's just Yuri... Ew~

The story itself is great.

don't know if you've dropped the story or not but i've enjoyed reading it. Wish it was updated or finished personally.. Good luck with your writing

this is a great fic, one of the best mokoto keitaro stories ive read on

Keep up the good work and bring out the next chappy soon plwease?

update please! i really like this story! please!

oh! toko and kei .. ehehe ... i love the story so far _ .. do keep up the good work yah? can't wait for the next chapter!

Alright! Two new chapters of this great story have been released in the last couple of months or so since I've been on the 'net.

This fic continues to be a most superb one. The whole Shinobu/Su thing (which was only briefly discussed in Ch. 3) was quite an unexpected turn and was done very well. Typos were at a minimum. However, it needed more stuff with Kei and Motoko, not that there wasn't plenty. It's just that they're my favorite LH pairing (I don't like Naru).

Gimme more K&M. More!

P.S.: Did I mention how great this fic is?

P.P.S: This fic rules!

great story, please continue writing

Hey, new user here writing in to congratulate you on a so-far awesome fic! I'm not a yuri fan, at least not for Love Hina, but I can set that aside for a fic that's as good as this one is. I'm still waiting for the 3-day period to be over so I can post, but while I do, I'm using the time to visit all the Motoko fics I can... Until I visited this site, I felt like the only Motoko X Keitaro fan out there! Still, I guess I'm not, ne? Anyways, about the fic: I really enjoy the direction you're taking it, even if Motoko is just a *smidge* more forward/lusty than I would have made her myself. Though the premise isn't new (I've seen several other stories based on that combat, some quite good) the story you're constructing out of it certainly is original. And though Motoko is still my favorite, I've always held a bit of a soft spot for good ol' Konno, so I'm interested to see where this goes... Finally, your writing style has gotten a bit better as the chapters continue, and with some effort, it'll hopefully continue! No one is a perfect writer, and we're all constantly polishing our skills through experience, so keep thinking about ways to improve what you're doing! Anyways, thanks for providing the community with another great fic centered around Motoko! Please keep writing, and make it quick! I'm hanging here!

Good luck on all your endeavors! Maybe once I get some more experience of my own, I'll come back and write a more in-depth review. Till then!

Hey,

Well, I think it is taking a better turn on the Shinobu thing, but still. Get rid of the homosexual stuff, I am wondering how you can add such an immoral thing into an anime like this, the anime is supposedly innocent of anything bad. Still, you still can change it back to normal on the homosexual related things.

i hope u will get another chapter out soon this is good

WOW! nice story, love the plot and the chars seem real as well. tho the shinobu's sexuality thing is a little unconventional (haven't seen many, but then again, i haven't read as much as some people.)

keep it up and update soon.

O.O;; ...uh...yeah, update i guess.

ikari shinji

I'm glad you've continued to write this series, it's an interesting one.

The sexuality theme being followed as a side-plot with Shinobu is interesting, but I feel it may be being given too much time when the focus of the story is supposed to be, after all, Motoko and Keitaro. I can see the link of Shinobu going that way 'on the rebound' but it is stretching the imagination somewhat. I'd like to see more of the blossoming relationship between Keitaro and Motoko, the primary plotline.

To answer Kitsune's question from halfway down ch.5, see the list of stories in my profile!

The whole Shinobu thing still seems a little weird but you've done it well. A very good chapter. If you do need a pre-reader (like if no one else wants to do it, give me a shout.