Outsiders' view of the Pevensies tend to result in some fun reading. This was no exception.

Ariel_of_Narnia

Daaaang that ending hurt but the good kind (clap clap clap)

Nice! The ending was particularly poetic. Great job!
VDMA,
Sophia the Scribe

:)

...the ending. Just,, the enDING. Loved your fic though

I really enjoyed reading this one-shot. I always (okay, usually always) enjoy reading fics about what happened *after* Narnia, and the fact that this one is your writing makes it all the better. :D I must admit though, I wanted the fluff to continue rather than end with that reminder of The Accident. I know that Peter and Edmund (and the rest) are happy in Aslan's country, but they were WAY too young when they died.

Anyhoodles, I'm glad you published this story. :) Thanks for sharing with us.

God bless!

Great story

I like this, it's sweet and beautiful in many, many ways. Thank you for writing it and sharing with us.

I like this story and I am sure I have read it before. Just something I noticed... the gun is knocked out of the assailant's hands by Edmund, yet Peter comes along and twists it out of his hands again. Bit confusing.

Also I note you insert asides in your narrative, jammed in with hyphens, but no spaces. Can I suggest using standard punctuation such as commas and semi-colons and full stops instead which you use well elsewhere? It made for slightly confusing reading at points.
Eg. When Peter looks up from the times to notice the order has been anticipated and earlier when Edmund is being snappish as they enter.

you know...
last battle really bothers me
I can never imagine Edmund dead

Ah, another spectacular story! Your writing never ceases to amaze me, I really enjoyed it!

I was wondering what on earth the title could have to do with Narnia at first, but then I read it and it was really good! Great job!

Great story! I like the outsider's perspective, Edmund the negotiator, and the way Peter is right there to back up his brother. The ending does make it bittersweet, it's a great glimpse into the lives of the Pevensies in England.

well I enjoyed it. Great story

"I had it sorted" - makes me grin ... :)

Edmund's such a hero ... love how he sorted this out!

Thanks for writing and sharing :)