I stumbled with this while I was searching for new things to read and it caught my attention, I really enjoyed the 4 chapters you made. Naruto isn't insanely strong but it's a minor detail for me. He still *feels* like himself you know? I'm sure he will slowly regain his true strength and if he doesn't, well, I'll still enjoy this.

The interactions between the character flow really well and it feels natural, another good point! I realised it hasn't been updated for over 2 years but I'm still hoping for a new update! Thank you for the read

Update bitch.
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Update bitch.

Amazing story, a pity It seems abandoned It had a really good premise

Have been a waiting for this for years.i hope u continue this story.
Keep up your good work really appreciate your story.

Just passing by with a few stuff to say:
1. This is a very well written story, and you're are brilliant writer! Good on you!

2. Some of the rewies are stupid. Why even remotely try to bring up things "YOU" find annoying about this story? Do anyone else see many of these stories out there? No? Me either! So stop flippin destroying em! It doesn't have to be perfectly accurate to be enjoyable, damn!

3. On that note, I very much enjoyed these 4 chapters (have only read two, but can already tell the others will be masterpieces as well mate). Thanks for creating it! If it ever crosses your mind to continue, I'd be one happy camper! XD.

And, yah. Hope everything works out for ya, and that you keep being as brilliant as you are!

Go watch Naruto again and again so your concept for Naruto change okay kid and learn from it.

am sorry but I have to ask, did u just say Naruto's hand to hand combat never been his strong suit. u are either the biggest idiot or have never watched Naruto but read it from somewhere, most of Naruto's move are close combat from a genin to kage. another shit story with unreasonable washed up version of Naruto. plz if u plan to make ur story, analys the character first in depth

the writing skill is good but the contents resembled what a middleschooler would write after watching too much anime

killing naruto was a mistake, he is in subaru's spot but he has more skill and power than Subaru would ever hold

'weakened' condition has diferent meaning for Naruto than it does anyone else, his version of i have no chakra is when he can only spam a few dozen clones, substitutions and rasengans. there was also no foreshadowing about it, in fact you had him with enough energy to follow Emilia for no reason for hours and even scare the strongest human character in Re:Zero

beside, why the hell was he hidden while doing so? naruto might be a ninja but he is an honest loud moted idiot not some ploting dark broding avenger, it is seriously OoC

he is a hero so he will save people but i do not belive he has the killing myself while doing so actitude that was added to Midoriya Izuku to appear heroic when he is nothing but a fanboy

the scene made him appear powerless which is a mistake for an overpowered character, not only do you add contradictory traits (overpowered underdog) but you are breaking the will of the reader to actually belive your story

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there is also a mistake that happen when you added the broken seal, such a chunny like moment has a higher chance of breaking the whole story as it shows that if they watned you could simply say a "God Say So and So It Is"

handwave the explanations i am omnipotent so i can do whatever i want

having him wit the inexplainable absence of the fox would have fit the Re:Zero Theme, his chakra simply being wonky would have been a better fir if you wanted to slowly regain levels rather than crush any oposition

beig taken at any moment of the shinobi war could explain the chakra exhaustion and weakened condition

heck there are many ways that the story can unfold but Diabolos Ex MAchina means that you basically want to use a motorcycle in a triccicle race and are only lossing the 1st few matches so people would suspect that it isn't an unfair advantage

as obviously as the diference between the tricicle and your motorcycle no one will fall for it

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to improve you must answerd

-how did he scare Reinhard when he couldnt beat the weaker vampire?
-why did he waste energy roof hooping when he is running on fumes?
-why is he stalking Emilia when he should be helping her out in the open?
-why is he even bothering with emilia in the 1st place when he has far bigger problems?
-if he is trully Naruto why didn't he create a shadow clone in battle?
-how are the readeer supposed to know that Naruto is tired when you didn't mention it?
-how strong is the vampire when compared with anyone from naruto Setting?
-how can the vampire defeat Naruto when he is a Fully Mastered Jinjuriky? (is not the mode itself but the streng needed to suport said mode for more than 5 seconds without dying)

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this reminds me of the Bleach Filler Chapters, new characters hitting beyond their weight class because of their weird, unusual and unique powers while bankai is underpowered despite being the Shinigami's trump card

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for advice on Re Zero you should read [Re:Zero why me?], the character there is strong and has explanations to why one should not die for no reasons

[Return by Death] gives you bad luck but you have to keep in mind that using it means taht the character lost and died, something that OP characters will not do easily

a character should not be weakened without a good solid explanation, gravity itself should be a good one, just remmber that [overpowered underdog] makes no sence and is anoying as heck so it should never be attemped

Cool!

like this naruto

Pluz update soon, this is really good

PLS UPDATE

Awwww, please update

Love this fic, please update soon