so when are you going to update this story? I really would appreciate it if you did it soon

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que triste

Don't stop writing. I like this story. Good job so far keep it up!

Haven't seen this story in a long time. Seems it hasn't been updated in a month either. Sad that Wilde blamed Carrots for everything, even though it was partially her fault that his place got trashed. But dude, you really need some English and grammar lessons, maybe an editor. It's really hard to follow the story sometimes.

Awww, Carrots is worried about Wilde, isn't that sweet?

Ok, I ain't gonna lie, this chapter was kinda boring, but I understand it's necessary for character development. I really expected Wilde to stick around longer tbh.

You should really, really, get an editor.

Wow, mature version is way more intense, guy got his head blown off. Think I'll just read this one now lol. For a longer review, check out the teen version since I don't wanna write the whole thing again.

I like how the desolation and crudeness of the Wasteland is reflected on your grammar. Actually, I don't. Your plot got potential, but the grammar is really distracting. Consider getting an editor. And maybe slowing down a bit, working a bit more on each scene/dialogue.

As it stands, this is just a copy of another story you have on your profile, making this a double-post. Not only are those annoying to your readers because it's just an alert for nothing, but it's also not permitted per the Rules & Guidelines we all agreed to before we post stories. My advice is to pick one rating (T or M), stick with it, and publish one version of your story, and leave it at that. If readers aren't happy, that's their problem to deal with. Take these suggestions into consideration, as they will help you avoid issues with the rules in the future. Please understand, I say what I say in the spirit of what this site is about: making good stories great, if not brilliant.

Best,
Zad
Critics United

Like the plot so far. Maybe add details slowly as to how the world ended, how long it's been, who started/where. Little things like double check capitalization. Otherwise it's pretty good, curious to see why your posting two identical stories and where the m rating is going to start, but still good job so far

Double posting on this website isn't allowed and these two stories are exactly identical.