These are great.

Only constructive criticism I have is that most women love when their partner kisses them after oral. That’s very normal and popular.

Thanks!

I must commend you on the last part, the one after the story. It wasn't even something I considered while reading your story, but you are absolutely right on the matter.

These three chapters were awrsome. Loved it

I love these two. I have too many OTPs. I mean I guess technically two is too many OTPs, given the phrase...whatever. Diakko so good.

And this story shows yet another way that being soulmates is cool.

I liked how this story was obviously about the...what did Diana call them? "Intimate sessions"? But the characters' personalities were on full display as well.

Sucy needs a lesson on concrete consent too. Some of those potions should be (are?) banned from casual use. Especially for especially casual use. And on unwilling or unknowing test subjects.

And now I want to read a story that follows Sucy's experiments with/on Akko.

I will never be able to hear the word/name/phrase "Shiny Rod" in the same way. I thought it was a dumb name for the most powerful magical artifact in existence to begin with, but now... I can't even be mad, tho. It's just so Akko.

*gives extremely satisfied thumbs up*

And yes. The F/F smut scenes I've edited were hell to make readable. You did a good job here. There were only one or two moments in the whole story that I was lost for a second, but it became clear what was happening within a sentence or two.

..."Shiny Rod". Goddamnit.

You have me so torn with this chapter!

I loved seeing them explore each other but it felt so quick, especially for the (can't think any other way to say it but) repressed Diana. She suddenly wants to throw herself into something she's had no interest in before?

They were so cute and endearing but maybe I'm just too jaded because it seems like they're not sexually compatible! This version of Diana seems like a once a week kinda girl and Akko seems like an every chance she gets kinda girl! Diana is a little fussy and wants everything clean at all times to the point of not kissing Akko after (which I totally get some girls are like that, but she just did that for you, c'mon Diana!). I'm not saying that's something to break up over, but unless they can grow together to the other person's rhythm it's something that's going to cause a lot of angst later for both of them. For Akko: not feeling wanted and for Diana: feeling wanted for one thing. Although the soulmate bond can probably overcome most of that since they'll be able to feel each others true feelings so that's a plus.

Also, Akko probably doesn't have to worry about Diana down there, I mean, she rides a lot of horses and has probably taken dancing classes so it's likely to be, let's say, good to go.

Anyway, I'm not trying to sound harsh, I love your Diana and Akko, I'm just so worried for them!

Oh man, that was raunchy, and I mean raunchy. No better way to put it other than that escalated quickly, very quickly.

So far though I like these lemons. They make for good lemonade and you have a nack for writing sex scenes.

In all seriousness you should write a chapter involving something BDSM related. Diana seems incredibly submissive and I think she would enjoy some kinky play.

Your stories are really great! From the princess and her kiwi to queen of kiwis. You are a very talented writer! I can't wait to read more. You write the characters and the setting so realistic! With creative ideas added. I feel like if they actually brought the two witches together in the show it would be so sweet! Never lose motivation in your writing! It's quite amazing, I hope for an update soon!

Every hot-dog needs a bun? Lol! Akko and her Shiny Rod...

What a fitting name for a strap-on that Shiny Rod.

Poor Akko, Diana’s prune attitude doesn’t let her use dirty words in their lovemaking, so she’s to improvise, so it was so funny to hear her said Shiny Rod. So I agree with Akko, the things she does for love.

Omg strap ons are such a god damn turn on, and magical strap ons? Sign me the fuck up, your writing really is getting better and better dude
But if I might add, (cis) women don’t have prostates, which means that in general, anal doesn’t give any pleasure to them(quite the opposite actualy), so if shiny rod makes a reappearance I’d stear clear of that

I think your story's are very amazing your very good at weighting thank you for sharing

Nice sultry lemon! And this is where they belong, not at the end of your other stories. I kind of hope you write more because you're very good at them :).

You can be assured, one person absolutely loved this story.

I still remember at the end of The Princess and her Kiwi you told us about how Diana wanted to set some rules, boundaries as you called this story, to enjoy their intimate life, so I'm glad to ser you hold on that promise.

Indeed, they made love, not had sex, because a powerful bond bind them together, making their intercourse a natural outcome to let the other know they love evwrything about the other, even if one of them is a little squishy. Way ti go Akko.

Another wonderful M-rated tale, if you called this dissapointing, I can't wait to read one you fully approve.

Bye

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Not sure what you found to be disappointing about this. It's mostly fluff with smutty moments but there's nothing wrong with that. Their butt fixation is cute!
I have to wonder how Hannah and Barbara deal with all the Diakkoing going on!