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Are you OK, Luna? Anyway, make more so we can save Lynn next!

My version of this scene! Lincoln and Clyde went through the vent and found Luna, tied to a chair! They had to fight Metal Sonic to rescue her! Lincoln got knocked out and was tied up to Luna! It was up to Clyde to rescue Lincoln and Luna! Clyde destroyed Metal Sonic and rescued them! Then they were surrounded by a ton of Metal Sonics! They destroyed them all and now they are headed for Leni!

Now that's I called a 'break' dancing.

You know what they say, "Becareful what you wish for or you might just get it."

Let's see; the family being uncharacteristically jerkish towards Lincoln, poor grammar, Lincoln snapping and cursing at his family. Yep, it fits the template of "Every 'The Loud House' Fanfiction Ever" by TakeBackTheFalls.

Only have Lynn Sr. die, I got a hate bone in me for him.

You're redeeming yourself. I like the twist. Keep it up.

Really get me excited, I can't wait to another chapter!

I'm gonna have to agree with previous reviewers, this story has potential, but the bad grammar is not only holds this back.

Another thing I'd like to point out is the format of this story: script format. The way you wrote t doesn't really force you to create bridges and work through errors.

I like the plot. However, this needs some work.
Bad grammar is a common mistake that has been seen in several stories. I am just pointing it out. Don't take any of this the wrong way. I like the story, it's just that the grammar sours it a bit. If English is not your first language, I'll give you leniency. Sorry about the length, it's just that anyone who gives a PROPER critique of a story is automatically assumed to be an asshole.

The idea of the entire family disappearing, leaving Lincoln alone, sounds interesting. Sadly, right now that is just about the only possitive thing I can say about this fic.

The first chapter is very rushed, with the entire family acting like big jerks towards Lincoln (who himself is presented as a whiny wimp) just to kick off the plot. Tearin up Bun-Bun is something the sisters would never do on purpose. Take your time to set up the conflict, and try not to demonize the Louds into unholy monsters who are all out to get Lincoln. That has been done to death by now and it's getting tiresome. How about a misunderstanding where Lincoln only thinks his family is mad at him for no reason, while in fact it was something else entirely?