Wow I am a litle late to say this but Thanks goodness this story is continuing, I had read it years ago and was very disapointed to see such a long time without updates. I was fearing it was canceled, but here we are now. I hope this time this story can be finished.

I really loved how sweet the story was, how all the sisters were falling in love with lincoln for that inocent video of when they were kids, pure inocent sibling love evolving into romantic love, that is what I like about loudcest. I will have to read it again to remember everything, thanks for continuing.

A well done chapter. Enjoyed the switching between the past and the present to help understand what happened for the Loud House to be in dismay and depressed to knowing that they are taking one step at a time to get passed it. It was endearing to read how Lincoln interacted with his sisters/lovers from the past and the present as he always have them come first in the relationship from hanging out with them or being able to always be there for them when he is needed. Quite amusing how Lynn is trying to get Tabby from liking or confessing her feelings to Lincoln and it doesn't seem to be working quite as well as she hoped or thought. Having a looking into the present time gives an idea as to what happened in the past as well as lead up to what will happen as Leni is scared of crowds and of people hovering over her. Nicely done with how everyone is reacting to the events that took place in the past with Lincoln being away a bit more as well as his training and with Leni's situation. Thank you. Keep up the good work.

Wonder what happened that made Lincoln run away for a 2 months.

This is a very good chapter. It is well worth the wait and I can't wait to see what happens next. It's so good seeing this story continue and makes me feel that I have to get off my butt and hurry up with updating my own stories. Please keep up the incredible work and keep going.

Review time!

I like your story a lot. The plot, the way you portray the characters, the situations they're involved in. Simply outstanding.

The way you use different characters in differents places, simultaneously by POVs, to paint a bigger scene of the world is amazing. How you use different POVs to the same events giving detail to what each of the character's feelings and thoughts are in regards to the circumstances is awesome.

I'd say on this you even surpassed George R.R. Martin, the author of A Song of Ice and Fire.

Your writing style, multi-pov and multi-time, reminds me especially of BigDiesel. They (yes THEY, it's a couple that writes together if I'm not wrong) have a talent and custom to writing in this manner, it's just a shame that most of their stories are so fucked up. I mean, reality IS fucked up, but man, that's another level right there when they write and describe the characters in their stories. Though, I will admit that they are amazing when writing Thrillers, Horror, Psychologic and things like that, they also are quite adept at destroying continuity for the readers (something you close to stumbling upon doing, I'll explain more below).

It's also quite clear when reading, to me at least, the influence of other authors of this fandom upon your writing style. AberrantScript, on the girls' thoughts and interactions with Link (Lynn and Leni especially). Devumaru, on the way the feelings develop between characters and even more from chapter 19 forwards. Flagg1991 and others also shine through, but these mentioned I think shine most in your writing style.

Don't get me wrong, it's YOUR style and only yours. You, somehow (probably with no small amout of hard work), managed to almost if not seamlessly merge their styles into one. That's talent right there, I would know because I tried and failed spectacularly. Truly, I know of only one other Author who has managed to do so and he's not from this fandom and he's a lot older here in this site.

Now, on constructive criticism, since the story arrived into it's second arc/volume the format of the chapters have been a bit confusing. Let me tell you why I think so:

You split the timeline into two: Then and Now. However, we don't really know which is the actual present of the story. My advice is, instead of mix and matching times, to put the present/future at the first half of the chapter only and the past/present on the second half only.

It gets really confusing the way you're doing now, constantly having to change gears mid reading and we end up mostly forgeting what went on the last part correspondent to the time of the actual part.

However, if you wish to continue doing things as they are, I suggest you take a look at 'RogueDruid (Icarius51)' works on Archive of Our Own, especially Hero Class Civil Warfare and Locked in Digital.

He has no stories for Loud House fandom, but his works have exactly the kind of split timeline that you're trying to use, he writes masterfully. I assure you won't be disappointed. And perhaps you can adopt or adapt a thing or two from him.

You're very good, but we can always grow better.

Good Work. I hope I didn't offend you and honestly I'm looking forward to reading more soon.

PS: By the way, you could kinda put a distinction on the title of the chapter indicating in whoch arc/book we are. For example: chapter 1 to 18 could be book/arc 1 (B1 or A1) because by itself it's already a self-contained story (it has beginning, middle, climax and end); 19 to forwards could be arc/book 2 (B2 or A2) until it was concluded.

PPS: I guess we all kinda know what happened or almost did to the girls at the party, so you could simply use the 'tell, no show' tactic here. There's already a helluva lot of stories where something similar happened and, here I'm not trying to sell your story or take on it short but, I feel like it would kinda just go down the route so many other stories do, even if you're writing of the aftermath is so muchh better -which it is much better - it feels like it would cheapen your story or just make you seem lazy to take something - uhg, that's nasty - so cliche like this and use on this masterpiece you're making.

A few people might get triggered, especially since something similar happened in the story Loud House: Future Love Run Amok with the same characters and a close enough situation. The biggest difference from what I saw between both your story and his is that your Leni doesn't seem to be going to develop/reveal a split personality (Proto-Leni). This fic is arguably, one of the best in the site, and undisputedly, one of the most successful here in the fandom, hence think about it real good.

So basically, coming back to the tactic, just give a description of the day and house, the party starts, a couple of short conversations... AND cut to the end of the event, more precisely, the scene of the (attempted?) crime. Actually, cut to the end of the attempted crime, it will save you a lot of time and headache, get the plot moving and more than satisfy us readers.

Again this is only an idea, feel free to use it or not.

Over and out. See ya.

Cool new chapter

And another great chapter congrats

Great story I love it:)

A really nice update here and its good to see lincoln taking some sweet actions himself.. keep it up! I get the feeling that im partly right in my theory.. and its good to see the other sisters show their emotions especially lisa... Nc update!

Thanks for the chapter! :)

Damn, this chapter give me FEELS!.

Okay, with that out of the way, I'm having a mixed feeling of sadness, fear and mostly curiousity on what actually happened to them that would caused such trauma.

I have my theory from the past chapters but I don't like it at all. I hope I'm wrong, but if I'm not, then I will really be dreading the chapter for the revelation.

Nice to see you’re back

PLEEEEASE continue this fic. This is honestly one of two of my favorite fics I've ever read and the other one hasn't been updated either. I know that just like everyone,you have your own personal problems to deal with but just know that there are still people following this fic and hoping that it continues. Wish you the best.

This chapter gave me diabetes. Congratulations A fanfiction gave me diabetes because of how sweet the beginning was. I hope you're proud of yourself.

Awesome update as far as things go.. adding more questions than answers amd its not a bad thing at all it really keeps the mystery going and also hot action going on with lynn cant wait for the others when they have their turn.
Theory: I think sully did remember the loud house family you jutlst dont forget the one you assaulted and the one who pressed charges after all and he planned to take vengeance with his buddies on friday on the party... Also explains the awkwardness of sam and luna as mentioned by tab... Sam probably blames herself for what happened... Oh well this might be answered in the next chapter