Great story

I feel like there should be an epilogue to fully conclude the story.

I'll be honest with you: I didn't expect to ever find an original, untrite, and well-written LH story. Firstly, because I'm actually not much of a Loud House fan and I find many issues with it (including the episode No Such Luck, Luan's eerily cruel jokes, Lisa's inhumane experiments, an 11-year-old's obsession with death and her parents doing nothing about it, and many, many others. There's just no way I could ignore such disturbing moments in a kids show.) And secondly because I've skimmed the LH archive out of curiosity, both the popular stories and the recent ones, and nothing piqued my interest. The character development and interaction sucked, the angst with Lincoln feeling the black sheep in the family was too predictable, and the writers' styles weren't good either.

So at some point, I stopped looking for LH fanfiction. I stumbled upon this story only because I was scrolling through someone's favorites, and the synopsis caught my eye. For some unknown reason, I decided to give it a try even though my previous experience reading LH fanfiction wasn't successful. And now I'm so glad I did. Like, I just spent a few hours reading these 9 chapters, and my eyes kind of hurt right now, but it was totally worth it.

For me, this was not a mystery story. It was a story that explored the characters' personalities and relationships in a way probably no LH story before did. Like in a normal situation, Luan wouldn't accuse Lincoln of egoism, and Lucy would've spoken out about Lori's problem, and Leni wouldn't hurt Luna or Lori or literally anyone physically. But you put them into such a stressful and unlikely situation we haven't seen them in (Lucy is desperate to finally have a sibling she can trust and we can forgive her silence since she's only 11; Leni is under pressure, and we all feel for her, and Luan is also going through some hard times), which allows you to make them behave in such ways and consequently delve into their personae more deeply. Very clever.

Moreover, you don't make Lori look like a complete monster, and I appreciate that. Instead, you give very plausible reasons for some strange aspects of her behavior and remind us, readers, that the world isn't black and white. I can totally imagine her having depression, especially since Bobby moved to a city, so the whole story makes perfect sense.

Overall, the syntax and vocabulary here are beyond reproach, the flow has the reader engrossed into the story, the suspense you built here is flawless, and the character development makes other authors green with envy. Very well done.

Thank you for the amazing journey.

Cool Story. Somehow I knew by chapter five. But it's amazing nonetheless. I am happy that you respected or did some investigation on depression. Think you did a pretty good job presenting a convincing case. Keep up with the good work!

Great conclusion to a great story. Thank you, very much.

Nice wrap up, pulled the story together nicely. This was a really good idea, and I thought you executed it really well. Hope to see more from you when you get the chance.

Before we start something about the hair pulling:
I guess some readers got upset over it because it is a very painful way to handle somebody and is often a sign of an abusive relationship.
A slap on the other hand can be seen in many forms… And considering Leni was in absolute terror about the idea of Lori committing suicide, her action looks more reasonable than Lori’s.

About the reveal:
Yes, I can believe that Lori is depressed. Depression can hit anyone and the symptoms can manifest in many ways and are sometimes difficult to recognize.
Lori’s side of the story was beautiful written as well as Leni’s view of things, especially the parts with the nightmare and Lori hurting herself.
Very good written and in rather tasteful ways I might add.

I like this entire fanfic, but:
There needs to be another chapter.
Now with Lori revealed as having depression, there has to be more… Depression cannot be easily overcome and doing it in only one chapter would be impious but there has to be something. She is visiting a psychiatrist, her family helping her and all that.
That you stopped is not the best ending.
Or: Do you plan a sequel? In that case, this ending may be acceptable.

But please: Something else come after this. This is otherwise a unresolved cliffhanger in a way.

Well, shoot. Didn't see that solution coming. Good job.

Again, he and Lori have more in common than either care to admit. Both of them look in the mirror and wonder who's staring back at them and what difference they make anyway and both are wrong to do so but don't know it because they're surrounded by children who take them for granted. Once they both get out into the world and see the difference they make, they'll be a lot happier.

You did good

This is really good, but do you think you will do maybe an epilogue or a sequel series, this has a lot of potential for further development. You did a great job with character interactions and how each character would probably react to a situation like this.

Wait a sec, is this the last chapter? I was kind of hoping for an epilogue of some kind. I want to know how the other sisters respond to the revelation of who really wrote the note.

I guessed it was Lori.

Wow, this has been a thrill and I'm itching to see how the net will close.

Lincoln is pretty astute for his age, isn’t he.

I like how the bait and switch wasn’t obvious going in and the rationale checks out. If you watch certain episodes of the show, they come across as troubling for Lori and there’s certainly more than meets the eye here. Most people will point to “Driving Miss Hazy” (and possibly “Change of Heart”) as evidence, where Lori’s inner demons take the forefront. But I think there are other episodes that show her as (or more) insecure than either of the ones mentioned above. Multiple episodes (“A Faire to Remember”, “Relative Chaos”, “Save the Date”) display a level of obsession for Bobby that can’t be entirely dismissed as comedy. But I think another episode that shows her insecurity is “No Guts No Glori”. Lori may claim that she doesn’t enjoy ruling with an iron fist, but that doesn’t explain why the parents can keep the House running when they treat their kids with a laissez Faire attitude (or why Lincoln can be a competent babysitter despite shenanigans). Its also important to note that she insists on wearing a drill sargeant costume and acting like one. It can be seen as a joke, but to me it’s an act of desperation. If she does enjoy being a dictator (and was just lying about not liking it), then it’s indicative of her desire to take advantage of being the oldest (which “Driving Miss Hazy” establishes is something she does). If she doesn’t enjoy it, then the costume is a reflection of her doubts over her ability to babysit. If others realize that they really can get by without Lori, then they’ll gladly ignore her and find someone else to babysit. But if she sends the message that her power-hungry rule is the only option, then it’ll insure that others will only turn to her for her. The costume is just an reinforcement of this message.

Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter for the “twist” and Lincoln’s cry for Lori to open up. It’s a tender moment and a reminder that Lori isn’t alone (something someone as insecure as her needs to hear).