thank you for the story and I must say I enjoyed it farm more then I expected myself to.

this is advice for future stories too, I have just noticed this one is finished

Annabeth's line of thought is confusing as is percy's, you also make it sound like us males are not only easily intimidated but also easily read. Although O cannot say how easy we as a gender are to read, I can say that we will be unfazed by threats as our typical take js to act 1st think later. The storyline is good in chapters 1 through 3 however therafter it starts to deteriate. this is partly due to you introducing new characters before fully intergrating the last characters resulting i ruhed character development and confusion in remembering what's happened. There are also a few plot inconsistencies. Story show potential.

Let me make a guess. You're a girl right? It's obvious the way made the female and male characters. A friendly advice, just keep an eye on that.

I feel like it was cut short . the ending only seems like part of the plot, not an actual ending

What gender are you? A independent whamen or a sexist male(ignore the stupidity)

hey there! been a long time reader of yours, really liked the development so far, keep going ! this style is just my favourite, though i really hoped in the end annabeth gets like a redemption for her doings, still loved it though!

THIS IS SO GOOD!

Damn the end though

I'm so confused I may be slow at this but who the fuck is riptide? Is he Percy but mafia version or someone else or is it a code name?

Nice chapter! So Annabeths behaviour confuses me a lot :D buuutt it is also very interesting. Keep going ;)

Hey! I love your story. Don't worry, I know what you mean by internal struggles. I have the same problem. Just know you can do it. Most of the readers love your story (I say most because of the useless internet trolls out there). We'll love it no matter what. You still have a better update schedule than I do. Lol.

Also, what were you doing up at this ungodly hour? Like seriously, waking up at this time is fuel for my nightmares.

You got to give more info.
all characters have confusing personalities.
Also since the updates are not consistant I have to read the previous chapter again!
Still a nice story
please continue

This story is definitely one I’ll stay till the end for!

Youve created a very interesting story, and cant wait to see where you take this. Keep up the good work!