I'm curious what's next

nice story, continue pls!

Aggiornarla presto, per favore! !...

Oh boy... "Horkruks making"

Got a laugh at that. It's actually written as Horcrux or Horcruxes if plural.

Hmm... I think this story would benefit a lot from having a Beta. There's some words missing sometimes, for example: "And I don't any money", a couple of misspellings that a Beta could easily help you with: "What do you thing?"

You also tend to mix prepositions sometimes "Amazed by the kindness of people on front of her" It should actually be: "Amazed by the kindness of THE people IN front of her" You are probably not an English native speaker? I do remember having that problem as well when I was learning English.

And lastly some of the dialogues don't sound as natural as they could be. This is very common to see in authors, particularly in those that are starting out, and I think that besides a Beta, it could help you to act out your dialogues out loud, and try to see if it would be something a real person would say. If they are not too stifled, if they are not too long. If the pauses in the dialogue are natural or not, if the dialogue is too informal for the character and so on.

Best of luck!
Luumus

This is interesting so far, and so I’ll keep reading. Thank you for sharing this story.

Love yhos story keep up the wonderful work

Love this work please update soon but please take your time with it hehe

Great chapter xxx

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Omg I lov this story xx

Lol xx

Woow that's gonna be INTENSE

damn son, so intense, but what about the scar? "mudblood" did it disappear? or something?

Continue!