SEQUAL

And 3 years later, they reunited with their older siblings again ;3

Oh, wow... that other guy's four comments ended up actually pretty harsh, if ya ask me. I think this was great! There aren't a lot of crossovers in AC's fanfiction so I'm so glad to see a good one! Although there was some credibility to "Fujoshi trash"'s comments, remember, stories don't need to be perfect to be loved! :P

One more thing. Karma wasn’t thrown on the streets. His parents are EXTREMELY wealthy and are ALWAYS out on business trips. Leaving him behind. The only bad thing about that is that he would never be able to see his parents that much. It’s not even as bad as Erza’s past! The past you gave Karma is completely incorrect and I think you should fix that. But once again it is your book not mine so it’s just a suggestion :)

One more thing. I’m pretty sure Karma could kill NATSU DRAGNEEL. If you’ve read the entire manga you would know that NATSU is a DEMON from the book of ZEREF. Yes, Natsu is a DEMON. So I doubt KARMA. A HUMAN. Could kill a DEMON.

I’m sorry when I said Wendy could beat Karma and Erza I meant Karma and NAGISA. Lol autocorrect sucks :’)

Mk so there are a couple things I find... interesting. Overall it’s a good story :) however there are many loop holes. First of all in my opinion if Nagisa and Karma we’re separated from Gray and Erza when they were children they wouldn’t be able to learn how to use magic or fight. Second of all, they are human. Normal humans at that. They posses no magic power from what I read. So therefore they cannot move at such speeds that would shock Gray let alone Erza. I don’t think Nagisa’s past would surprise anyone in the guild. Erza was enslaved as a child. So she wouldn’t be that shocked. Lucy had a father who didn’t care about her. Natsu, Wendy, and Gajeel all had a father/mother dragon who left them. I honestly don’t think Nagisa’s past is all that bad compared to anyone else’s in the guild. Third of all I highly doubt Karma. KARMA would be able to kill the GRAY FULLBUSTER. Gray possesses more expression where as Karma had only encountered assassination during the year he was with Korosensei. Unless that is there is some back story behind that you are up but it would be nice if you would go more into depth with that. As for Nagisa sure he has bloodlust and is very sneaky and very dangerous but not dangerous enough to pose a threat to MAGES. Karma either. Everyone in the GUILD possesses magical powers. Hell, Lucy could destroy a mountain if she really wanted to. Yes, she can. Wendy could destroy maybe even more. And she’s what, 12? Wendy can beat both Karma and Erza combined. Which brings be back to the point I mentioned earlier. Gray is LEAGUES above Wendy. So therefore not even KARMA could kill him. Or even injure him. But it is your book and you can write it however you like. I am merely pointing out some things I found to be a little on the unusual side. I have seen both anime’s. I have read all of the manga chapters of Fairy Tail and read all the chapters. So I just thought I would say something. You can proceed to write it however you see fit but I just wanted to point out these things. It is a really good concept over all. It just needs a little tweaks here and there. But that’s just me. Your the author and you can write it however you want. This is merely a review of your chapter and not a hate comment. I hope you take these things into consideration and make your writing a little bit better. It is really good right now but it has a lot of plot holes. :) And a lot of things don’t make sense. Enjoy the rest of your day :)