great chapter my doode please keep it up I'm so invested in this story it took me two days to read it all the way up anyways your an excellent writer, as someone who was a sergeant in the army you see some fucked shit and I have really bad survivors guilt and ptsd... it changes you. it's not something that can be over came so easily, though it might considering his guilt will come back to life. I'm not saying to torment Jason. but from here on out implementation of horror flashbacks would be needed to "sell" the idea of survivors guilt. thanks for listening. your great man keep it up.

just realised how dangerous polonium rounds would be in ME, polonium dust is enough to cause major organ failure in like 30 minutes, a grain of sand lodged into your body? holy crap that's effective, also a warcrime.

This is one of the best crossover fanfictions i had pleasure of reading i read the orginal one and it was great but yours do not dissapoint either. I even think that this story is better than game version. So please do not let it die. Błagam

This is the one of the best crossover i've ever seen, pure action, romance, and the alternate story which is in my opinion its better than the original of the ME tryology (don't know if i spell it right), nano suit is my favorite armor, i don't mind have one of those, even the cost of symbiosis, can't wait to the reunion beetwen Jason and Jane and the rest of the crew, keep up man, don't let us down with this, we'll be waiting for the next chapter! :)

The one thing that bothers me is that Sheppard never actually apologized for ordering Liara to mentally rape him.

All she said was "don't be too hard on Liara". Jesus.

Where is the apology? The remorse? The guilt? Oh, it's perfectly acceptable and normal to rape someone's mind without their permission and not apologize after the fact...totally normal.

They had no right to do this. I think Jason should have still been angry and cold towards them...he was way too forgiving. He should have been able to tell them under his own terms...when he would be confortable trusting them, to tell them the truth at the right time when he knows them better...but instead he was forced to tell them because of a situation that unfolded by Sheppard ordering Liara to rape his mind.

I'm sorry...but Sheppard and Liara should both be apologizing profusely over and over for a crime they committed...and I'm pretty sure Sheppard broke at least half a dozen human Genova convention laws ordering someone to rape a human mind. Fuck that!

Sheppard, apologize!

So this is gonna sound very asshole-ish, but I just really want to point out that "... sure as hell isn't Batman by any stretch." is a lie. He's got a similar backstory, he's got the tech, and he's slowly getting the fortune, even if it will probably take a while. You can't put those words and the story (up to this point) in front of my face and expect me to believe that.

Ok, that's all for now. Just wanted to get that out there.

clothes 90000 credits, monthly rent 700 credits, seriously!
Don't write random numbers.

"This is could be bad."

Yep, that about sums up what I've read so far. The amount of cliche in this story hurts to read, and that's before also considering the amount of spelling and grammar errors. It's interesting, but the errors bump me out of focus and then suddenly I notice all the other problems it has. It's a vicious cycle.

Oh god
Oh god
The way they misspelled sergeant
Oh god please
It hurts
Stop it

i love this please continue making more chapters

Is this getting an update?

He just slaughtered smugglers, i mean i dont know how much those guys would go to secure theri profit, of if they were killers...but i dont think JUST smuggling deserves execution. Whatever, i still really like this story!

I was hoping he'd be smart enough to record his conversation with Vasir and send it to Emily.

Are you ready to rumble! Tonight we have Maverick on one and the other Shadow Broker! And it will be bloody!

I really hope you update this soon it has been a long time and it is such a good story.