Naruto is finna kill some shit.

I want a harem.

This is amazing.

The way in which you create and resolve conflict could use some work. He does what's right and stops the Stone, they retaliate with huge force, Naruto comes out of it with people under him. He learns of the slavery at the Ivory docks, does what's right to release them with a huge battle ensuing, he has more people under him. He helps Nadeshiko village doing what's right, loses a large amount of his forces, subsequently gains the remaining Nadeshiko kunoichi; except this time he allows the slaughter of the defenseless Frost and also gains Kurotsuchi as a kunoichi very likely to fight battles with them. I like your story, there's powerful imagery in your fight scenes. But if you're going to stick to the same format, then stick to the same format. Naruto doing something that he believes is wrong in exchange for 800 kunoichi, soldiers, and Kurotsuchi doesn't really fit the theme of what you're doing, whether it's on purpose or you don't recognize the pattern you use for conflict. He makes the right decision to the detriment of the horde, subsequently loses forces in the battle, and gains more forces back right after the fight. There's no point in trying to include a dialogue on whether what Naruto does is right and wrong if the ultimate decision he makes is what's good for his people; the answer will always be obvious to the reader no matter how hard a decision Naruto has to make. Anyways, thanks for the update.

I'm catching up to my stories, damn it's almost been a year since last ypdate, and what a crazy 2020 it's been.

It is written very exciting. I look forward to how it goes on.

I think this is very interesting and would like to see more of this story, hope to see so,e new updates

I clicked on this fic randomly. no regrets

I'm just sad you didn't develop Asuka more before offing her. Sure, it may have been a big fat red flag, but personally, as a self-proclaimed veteran fanfic-reader, I could tell that you were planning to off her regardless. Granted, I was thinking something along the lines her of dying during an assassination attempt, not on the battlefield, but still. Granted, her death did give the victory a bitter-sweet tone, but it's not heart-wrenching. Personally, I just really don't see why I should care about her death (outside of respect).
Also, i'm sure it's already a beaten, dead, resurrected and once more dead horse, but personally, I think you're doing alright with conflicts. With the opposition he has, I don't think you can reasonably give him a major military defeat - not for a long, long while, so interpersonal conflict is the way to go. And sure, military defeats can lead to some juicy, juicy angst, internal conflict (by that i mean in the army), and all that jazz, but more direct personal conflicts, like the one with Ryu (loved that btw, even i I think that it only works because of a significant plothole, but what the heck, if Shakespeare writes tragedies that only work because of a comical lack of communication, then so can you), or Naruto's failure to protect his people (hammered in by the death of Asuka, which, again, I think you rushed; e.x., maybe you could have had her survive the battle, while making casualties among the Iron Guard worse, and have her try and fail to comfort Naruto, mostly due to her inability to understand - you know, the whole 'we are the Iron Guards, we can and will sacrifice out lives for you if need be'), which can be a parallel to the whole Haku-I-am-a-tool thing, as well as let you cast a foreboding light onto the whole relationship (foreshadow her sacrificing herself to save him later); then, your every following fluff-and-sugar-loaded attempt to make us care about her will only hurt more (yes, MOAR, gimme moar of dat juicy angst, tension, and suspense); if you are particularly cruel, you could give a few close calls, giving us hope that you are too kind to kill fan-favourite characters, and then, at the right moment - BAM! you pull a GOT maneuver and off her in a most dramatic manner. Further, if she's still alive, then Naruto's following interactions with Kurotsochi could lead to yet another source of drama and angst - fidelity, which could actually serve as an alternative method of setting Ryu up as a future antagonist. Beside that, if they get too close, then you could also have gone further to the whole favouritism thing (doesn't even have to that dramatic; maybe have Naruto overhear some soldiers joking about him going easier on her, which would make a person with his level of integrity burn), or maybe even have En try to stage an intervention, showing more of the side of him that got him sold as a slave (provided what he told was the full truth about calling his liege a c*nt). Tldr, I think you had a golden opportunity for angst, drama, and monologues/dialogues on the subject of love, sacrifice, fidelity, taking risks, etc. here, and you cast it for some short-term angst. Further, methinks you missed the opportunity to have a battle on a big-ass bridge, and we all know that bridges give awesome choke-points (before you talk about the Fire Army just sailing to wave, let me raise two points: a) sabotage, and b) Thermopylae; no-one said the horde could win; heck, you could have sneaked in a last stand by some units; or maybe a three-layered battle, with rangers and the elites duking it out above, the footmen clashing below, while some other units counter the enemy attempts to land (if the sabotage missions went well enough, then there can't possibly be enough boats to transport too many troops, and the bridge offers a nice bottleneck, so you could have justify sending a lot of foot-soldiers off to contest the landing parties; besides, what with the logistical issues, you could even say that only a portion of the army marched to Wave in pursuit; the rest are awaiting for supplies, because seriously, no foodno battle)). It would also force Naruto to address the question of what the hell do you do against gigantic dragons of pure fire flying towards a compact, cohesive formation (seals? walls of earth maybe, but then what about dragons-err, i mean lightning? some bull-excrement bloodline? further, with the dizzying mobility afforded by chakra for 1-d, 2-d, and 3-d movement, how would the battle have gone? can you just imagine, the weakened Iron Guard and the Rangers bouncing overhead against the Royal army).
So, TLDR, I think you did a fine job, even though i think you could have set up Asuka as more than a throwaway angst/motivation pill, as well as missed out on the opportunity to have a truly epic battle.

this fanfic is good and well written, but I don't like it, does it make sense? I do like kingdom building and politics but... idk, this is not my cup of tea.

please make more chapters

please make more chapters

Have Sakura missed Naruto. What if Sasuke is just a acting Hokage cause he never be one. He refused to started his clan until Naruto is back. Sasuke told the council about Naruto’s Clans. The council wants Naruto back.

ja li 2 vezes essa fanfic

there should be more chapters to this story