Oh my gosh, can Ace come back and swoop in to save her already before I lose my mindddd?!

lmfao.. I fogot to sign out of your account b x way to be so up yourself... lmao

She actually updated within a day... might actually trust you this time hmmph. hehe luf you x great chapter.. wasnnr expecting sabo to make an appearance

Love Sabo buuuut I have a weird feeling that he’s gonna try make a move on Ace’s Girl. Get yo girl Ace. Love love loving the updates hoe. I need fhem to reunite already (fuck sakeees)

Yay, I’m so excited for new chapters

Fuck me up and call me Nancy. You really fucked me with this update. Need more, those five chapters better be here soon, I'm suing your bosses for tiring you out. Thank U, next chapter, please.

I'm so glad yu posted, i honestly thought you were gone for good. I love love this chapter, as always Nami pisses me off but hey at least Ammy has Zoro and Robin my faves x hope everything is good girl.

You fucking hoe! (I' glad youre okay) but bitcccch its been fucking ages and you give me angst? Lesssgooooo

I read this whole chapter through, to be sure that my initial thoughts weren't rushed.

I have some suggestions. The very first is to go back and edit, or find yourself a beta reader to do it for you. There's not really any problems with spelling or word choice that I noticed, but the grammar needs touched up...badly. It's important to end sentences with periods, instead of simply separating multiple sentence with commas. Commas are connectors, but they should be used appropriately, since it will not disguise the run on sentences.

My second biggest suggestion is to practice showing and not telling. The vast majority of the first couple paragraphs reads as a profile, and a too detailed one, at that... It's generally not a good idea to start your character introduction by describing their look in grave detail, and proceeding to give a small crash course on their autobiography. Maybe try to give descriptions through the eyes of another character, the way that was (so briefly) done with Ace.

This isn't a suggestion, but an observation. Amethyst reads as a Mary Sue from the beginning. Now, the world of One Piece is unbelievable and uniquely strange, and full of gorgeous people. You can accept that she's stunningly beautiful easily enough (not so much if one day, she rivals Hancock for her title, though).

However, if she is a Devil Fruit user, then seastone would ALWAYS affect her. She CANNOT be an exception to this rule. If her powers cannot be explained by a Devil Fruit... This is probably not the universe for her. There are powers granted only by eating a Devil Fruit, and again: she should not be an exception.

I would be interested in the idea of a slave who has only known captivity all her life if it didn't read so... dryly. The details that are unloaded upon you immediately about her past as a slave seems to have no relevancy when you were just introducing her appearance the paragraph before it. It might have been best to just have her meet Ace straight away, and then reveal those anecdotes as time passed.

Additionally, I know we're supposed to pity her due to her life as a slave, but she is somehow not treated like other slaves? Is it because she's just so beautiful? I would imagine many of the types of people she is enslaved to would value beautiful slaves, and have many. It seems a little unnecessary to mention that she's an exception, if you're looking to play on angst, and such.

I genuinely think this idea might have potential, but unfortunately, the grammar makes it hard to read. I'm sure it improves as the chapters advance.

That STUPID IDIOT! I swear I wish I could hit him myself if Ammy doesn't I will
Poor Ammy she deserves better treatment than this! Agh!

Waiting for them to reunite is giving me anxiety .. it needs to happen or im going to wallow in misery with Ammy

Wooo! I really need to get an account so I can keep up with updates. Am is really making me sad, she obviously misses Ace so much.

I need them to reunite this is amaxing no kidding this was such a satisfying updatte

Ammy and Luffy's relationship is so beautiful. I don't even know what to say I love this story so much. I get that feeling that you get in your chest its like anxiety but excitement. probs makez no sense but its a good thing. i dislike when people rush authors but dude i need the next chapter asap

love love love love love this fic. it is by far my favorite keep up the impeccable work