First off, I want to say that I really did enjoy the story. I did not feel that it was a copy of Mr. chaos’s work at all. I really liked how you showed the dangers of what Pokémon go through when they fight because that isn’t something you always see and it is glossed over in the show. I also liked how you made it seem more realistic when the four of them fought their enemies. They are only 11 and they shouldn’t be all powerful.

The one thing I did have a problem with with this fiction, was the inconsistencies. I know you mentioned in one of your author notes about the air you made with Harry not knowing or knowing about Pokémon. However, there were quite a few other inconsistencies. One that I can think of off the top of my head is the mascot for slytherin. You said that it was Arbok and then you changed it to a seviper when you had Lee announcing the match. Then it went back to being the Arbok. Another one was when you said you could only use one Pokémon during the glade matches and then Ron sent out a second Pokémon. They aren’t huge things, but they tend to add up over time. My advice would be to go back through the story and clean those up a little bit.

Otherwise, it was a pretty good story.

honestly? We can do without having this a copy from chaos. His characters are plain shit or gary stue and your Hermione seems like a freakign pain in the ass

I like the idea of Harry getting a Litten, Hermione a smochum and Ginny a alolan volpix.

I like the story please make more chapters frum the books

So...glaring inconsistency that I'm shocked hasn't been fixed. After making breakfast he talks about becoming a runaway pokemon trainer...then asks Hagrid what pokemon are?

Like...wut?

oh heck

I loved this and my only suggestion would have been to use honchkrow instead of Pidgeot.

Hey I was just wondering when the next book is going to be out, it's been a while

Hoping that you’ll start the next book soon; the first one was good

Hey I'm really excited about this story. I can't wait for the next book. I really hope you finish it soon so we can read more of this awesome story.

Really enjoyed reading this fanfiction. Can’t wait till the secon book

please post here when you the first chapter of the new story so we get a notice

This was great! Thank you for sharing this, I love it! When to get the time please write more!

I dont know it seems unrealisitc that the pokemon world is so secret in this fic

I find very few of the hp/pokemon cross overs are worth the time it takes to read and dismiss them. You however did a good job mixing the two universes not completely smoothly. Well enough thar i look forward to seeing where you go as you progress along the story. Good luck.