The last chapter! Hooray! Now to get everything wrapped up in a nice little bow... *reads chapter* but that was, wait, where’s my resolution?

All kidding aside, I enjoyed it! The gnomes were awesome! The Pony Head tentacles thing was good and creepy. Janna’s death felt a little rushed. I kind of wanted the epic showdown with Eclipsa and Star and for the Starco ending... but I trust that Pillars of Magic will do the job! Great job, Terepin!

One by one, and Star's party got taken down. Tom's might've been the most painful as he had to deal with murdering trees.

I can already imagine how powerful Eclipsa is by just controlling so many dangerous entities like that.

And despite the circumstances of the baby being created, I hope the little girl/boy gets to live. And did Marco turn from captive to possible savor of reality? He's going up to places, and I feel that Glossaryck was referring to how things happened in a way they weren't supposed to.

Wait, wait, wait! I thought this story was completed, dammit.

Also, I almost started shipping PonyTom.

How many more chapters do you estimate?

A MonStar AU sounds amazing.

Daaaaaaamn. Is it weird that I love it more now that the brainwashing is gone ?

Wow, Chapter 13 was definitely the best written thus far. Writing action scenes aren’t easy from my experience, but y’all nailed those. River was SO. EPIC.

I’d like to say, for the record, that I thought this chapter started off a little shaky. Much like my previous review where I stated my uncertainty on dreams being written as such, this felt like it jumped around (which now I’m more certain was your intent.)

Poor Marco! Also, damn Eclipsa falling for the Diaz charm!

I am curious to see how it ends!

Okay, so Eclipsa mind-controlled him? It makes sense, and She is about to Rock. His. World.

Though, I am very interested to find out:

A. Is Eclipsa really being evil and spiteful to the Butterfly family by doing this with Marco, or is she just lonely? Maybe both?

B. What’s up with Star and Glossaryck? Also Luna?

C. How will Marco react to Star when he sees her again?

D. How long has Eclipsa had him at this point?

Also, I did notice some small spelling errors, and the dream seemed to skip over stuff (but I imagine that was intentional, as dreams tend to do that.)

All in all, great effort!

This chapter seemed way out of character and was riddled full of grammar errors... until the halfway point!

I adored them getting their feelings out into the open!

I’m really interested to see how you go from canon Starco to Marclipsa in the next chapter!

Terepin, this chapter was absolutely MASSIVE!

All in all, I enjoyed it. I think it should’ve been two parts just comparatively to the other chapters, but I digress.

There were a couple of minor grammatical errors, but the main one was double negatives.

You’d say like “I don’t want it neither.” It should be “I don’t want it either.”

It’s sad that the Scribe’s potential girlfriend didn’t make it. This chapter felt darker than the others by far!

It was like Mewberty and Booth Buddies had a baby (in a good way).

There were some issues in the beginning as far as grammar and tense is concerned, but I have forgotten what they are lol

There were some present tense sentences in this chapter, but wow, the setup has happened and I can see the pieces start to fall into place... the major question know, is how does canon Marclipsa happen?

Luna is interesting as heck! I want to see how this goes

No real grammatical issues to speak of, but the exposition on Eclipsa’s character is fantastic!

If I had to find something to nitpick, maybe some of the things she says seem just a hair out of character?

Either way, I can confidently say that each chapter is getting better

Chapter 4 definitely ups the intrigue. Also the spelling/grammar is definitely getting better. The only thing I really saw here is Phoenix was spelled wrong (I wonder why I caught that one :Pand the wings “shotted” out. I assume it was shot out, but maybe another word? Spread out?