This chapter was both funny and pretty. Especially when you included Snorlax and Lucario.

Wow! I am liking this story so far.

Are you going to add mega evolution as well? Would Charizard only Mega Evolve into one version or can he Mega Evolve into both version?

Another great chapter!

I love the detail you put into Sparky's backstory, as well as bringing in the characters from the games! Quite surprised to find out that Dedenne was Sparky's real starter Pokemon. Also, I wonder if we'll get to see Blaze in the future?

I also enjoyed the little romance sprinkled in there. Very cute moments! I especially loved Erza having to resist the urge to pet Pikachu! Let's face it, don't we all want to pet Pikachu?

And of course, Sparky vs Natsu! I was honestly wondering if Sparky would win or if Natsu would somehow pull it off, but looks like Sparky came out on top! His plan was pretty clever, though that fight definitely could've gone south if Natsu had succeeded in eating Charizard's tail flame! Good thing he stopped him from doing so!

Very interesting to see that Sparky's aura protects him from Mystogan's sleeping spell. I wonder how that'll play into things in the future.

And finally, Laxus... Oh boy... That guy...
I'll be honest, I haven't gotten that far into Fairy Tail yet (around episode 55 or so, if I remember correctly) so I don't know if Laxus is gonna become a decent guy or what, but for now, not exactly a fan.
As for his meeting with Sparky though, that was awesome! It's always satsifying to see someone stand up to the big bully and not be intimidated in the slightest! Applause to Sparky for that!

As I said, another great chapter! Keep up the amazing work!

Sorry I was delayed for this review, but I managed to get to this as fast as I could despite what I’m going through. Anyways, here we are with a brand new chapter after so long, and it’s the end of the Lullaby Arc and bridging us towards a new arc set up down the road…whatever it may be. Here we got some prelude to what Sparky’s backstory was, which quickly transitioned into a mess that he got himself to that trends into his life now. We also got to see how he had to fair against the stubborn Natsu and his overpowering pride, and to that we got a head-on battle with these two mages, ending up as Sparky on top. Throughout all this, it was a great way to turn the tables after so long of a wait.

So we start off on Sparky’s childhood at a young age. Even at such a young age, he had so much energy that he could do anything. Though being a small child, I found it only natural to have him have that much energy to run circles like crazy. But from the way that it was portrayed, he must have a massive abundance of metabolism to keep himself going. Must’ve been an offspring gene thing because his mother is normal-energy and his father is lowly energetic to where it bugged him. To this, we get a resentment from the father that irks him later on in life.
But here we also learn Sparky’s real name was Collin. And he was friends with Lyra and several other characters we are also familiar with in the core games. I thought it was shocking how you incorporated them into this one part. With this being a flashback and all, we understand the early history of Collin and his Pokemon, Dedenne.

Dedenne is also a Pokemon that caught my attention. After reading this whole chapter, I got the impression that this was like Bonnie and Dedenne from the XY series. And I wasn’t wrong because Collin ended up down that road as well. It’s basically looking into a mirror, since they have yellow hair and blue eyes. But with Dedenne not being in the party right now, I really wanna see more about this Pokemon since this cameo was so small.

I was shocked that you included Tierno, Trevor, and Shawna into your fanfic too. So basically we have all the core support characters at this point hopping in, not that it’s a bad thing. But this observation makes me wonder a little more about what kind of dynamic they had, otherwise I feel it’s like the games. Again, no big issue. I wasn’t expecting how Sparky got his nickname though, being from the games as well! Really, my guess was that when he was thinking of a name, Dedenne accidentally shocked him with Thunder Shock or Nuzzle, and then we’d REALLY see those sparks fly lol

So following after the nicknaming, Sparky explains further how in link to all this, he was so excited to be on a Pokemon journey when he turns 10. And this is where we get a realistic shock, because in real life, no kid could really survive a long Pokemon journey handling monsters with destructive powers. So to this, officials made it a new law to be moved to 13, where teenagers with a little more wisdom can handle themselves better. However, Sparky had a backdoor in the form of his brother. After being spoken behind his back by his begrudging father about his impatience with Sparky, he ran away from home and ended up in Route 2/Santalune Forest, where his brother saved him from a Beedrill attack. From there, instead of going home, Sparky went with Blaze on his journey and saw all around Kalos for his own leisure and fun. But then disaster struck when Team Flare attacked, and while Sparky was on the sidelines, his brother Blaze had to do all the heavy fighting for himself. Sparky was too energetic to stay in the Pokemon Center, so he had to help when Yveltal would come back to full power to stop them. So when Blaze was about to be attacked, Sparky was ‘getting in the way’ by distracting the avian, only for Blaze to take the attack instead. While I agree that Sparky was getting carried away, Erza was also right when Sparky did manage to save his brother from a deadly encounter. But really it’s tough to say. Sparky to this day still blames himself since that incident, and he couldn’t risk Dedenne also undergoing that hell again. Being without Dedenne and not hearing from his brother while in the hospital, he set off on his own journey, without hearing from either ever since.
Now I’m curious what kind of reception we could have with Sparky and his two familia after all this time? If we do get some kind of event where they end up in his world, that would make for an interesting venture, and how he would handle facing Blaze again.

So saying goodnight to Erza, the scene ends on a happy note with Erza understanding his past more. I winder if Sparky would be okay if she called him Collin. Because hearing it from her mouth, saying Collin sounds more like Erza than saying Sparky.

After being released from a one-night stand-er, I mean sentence! Erza ‘concluded’ her fight with Natsu, which turns against Sparky. With Natsu listing all 6 of the Pokemon that Sparky had, the terms were made and cleared, and the battle took place.

So setting up for the battle, Sparky started off with his Aura Guardian powers to measure himself against Natsu’s tendencies. I was starting to think that you forgot the effects of Aura Sphere when it missed Natsu, but thankfully you remembered! I’m actually surprised with how you had Natsu be so stubborn throughout this fight. With the Aura Sphere and battling against Pikachu Take-Over, I thought he’d end up toasted after that last leg with Pikachu.

Erza wanted to cuddle Pikachu so bad XD My god, Lucy read her like a book! The question here is…will Mira beat her to him for that cuddle?

I’m still very unsure about your standings of a massive movepool for the 6 Pokemon. I spoke about this before, but with there being 4 moves, and with ALL these attacks Pikachu has, it’s hard enough to keep tracks of them all. But we did learn that this is the cosplay Pikachu that people can get in the ORAS games. The battle entailing Pikachu was pretty good and reasonably choreographed. There could’ve been better tweaking with the order of his attacks, like use maybe Electrweb, then Agility, and then Electro Ball. Or maybe use Thunder Wave, then Agility/Electroweb, and THEN Electro Ball. Those are just some tweakings that I feel would adjust into the battle, but I think the paralysis would’ve done a number on Natsu.
After the Pikachu withdrawal, we get to Charizard, and this is where I question the incentive. I get the Seismic Toss attack was for the motion sickness ordeal, but why would Sparky use those Fire-type attacks? Couldn’t he just hammer away with Slash or Air Slash rather than reenergize Natsu? That’s just the one part, but the finisher with Seismic Toss made sense, and that was just fine.

So after kicking Natsu’s butt, things settle down for Sparky and the guild. We get a small gap before Mystogan shows up, but like many OC stories, Sparky wasn’t affected, and it wasn’t because of loud heavy metal earbuds or some special power. It was because of his aura, which I can understand. It’s basically like Sweet Veil or Safeguard, so he was safe from ‘status conditions’ like Mystogan’s spell.

Afterwhich, we get a small introduction of Laxus. Right now, we all didn’t like Laxus as he was arrogant, and Sparky pointe that out. But with how matters are now and how he learned how Laxus was S-Class leveled, which is Erza’s level at the very least, he knew best to back off. I give him props for the boasting but that energy he has still is there. Maybe it’ll cost him soon.

So with the feedback of S-Class on the mind, Sparky now has a new goal in mind, and he will have to work for it now with missions. Let’s see where this goes for him. I honestly hope it’s an original take than Galuna!

So, overall, I liked a large sum of what you did here, ranging his past and how he became a trainer, to the struggles and guilt he still feels to this day about Dedenne and Blaze. The battling was refined well in my opinion, and we got to see more of him and Erza get closure on one another. We got a good chunk of what the broad part of his past was like, though there are still some gray areas that can be explored later on like his father and brother. Plus adding in the current pairing for just Sparky and Erza, I’d be wondering if anymore spokes will be added to this wheel, if you get what I’m saying. Personally, I’m hoping we get an original arc than Galuna Island. That way we can get some alone time with Sparky and his own adventures with his Pokemon. Plus we might have more ample room to see how you can add various characters if you wanted to.

Great job man, and I can’t wait to see how next chapter will unfold! :)

~Insane Dominator

Awesome update :)

I wonder if there's gonna be running gag of Happy teasing Erza about loving Sparky in the future chapter.

I loved this chapter it was Really good I loved how kept natsu and sparky on basically the same level of power and having sparky use tactics to win. I've seen a few fanfics like this where the character steam rolls Natsu and goes on to beat erza and laxus. but this is different your oc is working hard and isn't just massively over powered. but actually works for it. also I can't esoteric what that other parring will be

please moar!

I'm sorry but when Lucy talked about seven houses being destroyed, my mind went to the missing cities, mountains, Edolas... castles that fairy tail has destroyed. Sorry mate, couldn't help but laugh

Good to know all the Pokemon Sparky has but I was wondering to spice things up how about adding the Pokemon in Sparky box but you’ll probably say no so I’m just saying it because I’m just gonna put the idea out there

This is great! Can’t wait to see Natsu vs Sparky!

Happy 2019! To kick off this year, I wanna say good luck to writing as many chapters and getting as far as possible in your fanfics. It’s been pretty good so far, and a lot has been tied well to canon. This chapter was no exception. You didn’t deter as much from the canon as needed, as it was important to get the Council matters into play. You made yourself aware of the predicament following the Lullaby incident, as well as the relevance to some plot points that could’ve been prolonged. To that, I can see that you’re adapting very well from my story.
So, let’s start from the beginning and see what we’ve got: With the Lullaby Arc coming to a close, we skipped over the Clover Canyon episode, which soon leads to the next episode, which was Natsu VS Erza in front of the guild hall. It’s here that we see the canon fight between, and soon enough a messenger of the Council showed up and arrested Erza and Sparky for a mock trial to prove the Council’s power. It’s there, they meet Seigrain, and soon enough Sparky goes and throws the Council trial in a maelstrom because of his defiant personality. Natsu and Happy soon plunge into the room, and all four end up in a jail cell. It’s there that we start getting insight in the backstory of Sparky, and what appeals to be his brother as well.

Grammarly, I saw little to no flaws in any of the scenes. Punctuation was on point, and everything in whole flowed evenly well. Scenes weren’t too long, but the details in the paragraphs were well oriented and got enough out of a character’s actions and mindset.

So then, when I look at the beginning of the chapter, I felt that you could’ve condensed that a little more. Since what you were doing was skipping over it, you didn’t have to detail about the specifics of the Clover Canyon trip. It was possibly 1K in detail alone just by short-handing it, but I felt skipping over it as a whole would’ve saved a lot of effort. The specifics of the chapter’s beginning was primarily to see a little about Sparky’s behavior, and we learn that he’s reasonably patient with fishing, and that he isn’t a picky eater like a Snorlax. But all that aside, the only ideal thing we got from this beginning was just those two things. That said, it you’re going to exclude episodes like those, a little more condensed and shorthanded detail would work out quite nicely.

With that said, we get on to the next part, which happens to be the part of Natsu and Erza. So, like I said before, you followed the canon on this one, so there wasn’t too much to go off of with the fight in general. It was straightforward, leading all the way up to the next segment, which was the frog arresting Erza and Sparky.

So, in the Council room of Era, we also see that Sparky and Erza are escorted. We see that you also didn’t adjust too much involving Seigrain’s introduction, resulting in his and Erza’s acquaintance. With his and Sparky’s interaction, we can also see that he is also underestimating the level of skill that Sparky has and can in fact develop between the Tower of Heaven and the arcs that you want to cover.

So then, this is where I start to throw some conspicuous demeanor. Not that it’s in a bad way, but with the whole Council dynamic playing out, it was all fairly standard, with Erza being held in a mock trial, and Sparky as well. The defiance scene I felt was VERY well done. If I didn’t know any better, I’d say that you got his defiance from Nic in my story. You know all too well of the defiant body of Nic from my stories, so I wouldn’t be surprised if you actually took his defiant demeanor and added that to Sparky. There has been a LOT of copying of my character – just saying -but I’m maintaining awareness. But with Sparky, I feel that you did a good job in making his facts true, and that even the Council isn’t above getting false statements. I always loathed the council and authorities, because they think they’re so high and mighty, when I feel they don’t even know what’s going on around them. So I felt that you justified this scene well, and that because of this initial confrontation, it will be held as a landmark for whatever it is that you intend in regards to the Council and Sparky’s affiliation to Fairy Tail later on.

Soon after, we also see that Natsu and Happy both helped, just like in the anime/manga, but alas, it only confined them in a jail cell that night.

So, after the whole thing, we also see that you added a little something extra to boot. We see that you went and added a sidestory somewhat involving Sparky’s past that he made up. It was an interesting history no less, but I feel that the Council is going to be looking into said history later on, and that will lead to the truth being found out eventually. I’ll be surprised if it wasn’t.
But of course, later on in the cell, we now see that there was half-truth to Sparky’s tale, and that he had some brother apparently. So he has a sibling, or at the very least some kind of sibling figure. And it also looks like next chapter, we shall be seeing the works of his past, or rather, a fraction of it.

So, overall, this chapter was alright. It was straightforward, but I felt that the details involving Clover Canyon could’ve been condensed a lot more. It will in fact save a lot of space and effort that can be used to help in building up the rest of the chapter and plot. In that light, if you wanted, you could’ve gone a little further with the plot/next arc and maybe save the history session for later. I feel that just like Gray and Erza, and what I did for my OC, you might want to have a whole arc in dedication to Sparky’s history. That’s my personal perspective at least, but let’s see what you can make use of.

I hope to see more of your ideas soon, and what the next arc idea will be!

~Insane Dominator

This is so good! I'm glad I found it!

Phew! Sparky and Erza A-OKAY, and Fairy Tail Guild is SAFE! That was GOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDD~!