I demand that you release more CHAPPY'S from your dungeon. only 19 is not enough for us

So when’s the next chapter?

So when is next chappy coming out from womb?

I'm at chapter 14 so far and the story is good however I do feel way more disappointed in the fact that star has barely even been in the story so far it's really just been about brittany and sabrina and occasionally janna but not even in a regular adventure the closest ones that come to mind was still Marco focused dont get me wrong their good and shows his flaws and past trauma but they dont show star much and last chapter Jackie seemed to know stars own subconscious crush very similar to Marco in canon also its probably just me but Mina and Hekapoo both are hundreds of years old it's kinda weird to have a relationship with them tbh I mean i dont particularly like Minaj with Marco and actually do like hekapoo and Marco but still kinda off relationships either way I'm typing way too much Just keep producing great chapters and quality and sorry to hear you've had rough times hopefully it only gets better

Hekapoo and Pixie. This is gonna be wild.
May I ask, do you plan to add Brunzetta in the future?
It'd be interesting since they were friends and Star implied they had something more intimate.

Yeah boi

Don't worry about about the people who give you a hard time. You never disappoint us.

Oh, a catfight, or should i call it to-be-battle royal? Btw, its my guess but the pairs of mistresses will be starckie, sabna, mina/britney and sugarpoo?
Anyway
I suppose apologises are a must cause ive been quite vocal in reviews for this story and lfld..
Good luck with your book though

I'll try to pm about being a beta but for some reason i cant log in from my phone to do so... damned buggy mobile versions

Genial

Interesting take on the lore and culture, I hope you mix some of the elements of this Marco's heritage and the cannon history, just hopefully a different ending.

Fantastic job! No matter what the critics say, I always enjoy reading your stories!

excellent work on this chapter :)

Great chapter

Hey, nice update here, and don't worry, take your time.
Keep the good writing.

yay a new chappie my life just got better

Hey
I really like the story so far and i appreciate the overarcing plot you are setting up. Marco x harem is kinda out of touch sometimes but The FEEL is there when it needs to be. Ive got some really good laughs out of this fic, like whenever Tom or Mina are around i end up laughing my ass of. And weeb Britney is so f*ckin hilarious
(Hopefully)constructive criticism:
1. GRAMMAR
like rly your/you're is an absolute mess, some sentences don't make sense and maybe you could have used comas more for sentences to be more fluid and structured
You dont have a deadline for posting chapters so i dunno, like reread then a couple of times? Ask some friends to proofread it?
2. Dont get overhelmed
It happens a lot with other fics, writer tries to start a big arc and gets lost in a million points of view, plotlines that remain in the air, shitton of explanations, flow of the story dies immediately etc, you know what im talking about... AND GOD FORBID YOU TO START AN ARC ABOUT GUILFS AND GOING ON QUESTS
anyway
Im waiting for the next chapter, show us what you've got