Not bad for a first, I'd love to see what happens as the plot developes. You do have a plot right? Ah well, at least you have an OC now. As for any critics, If it flows reading it and forms an image in your head as you imagine it(e.i. descriptive words), then you should be set in your writing. I hope to see you soon in later chapies!

please continue

I really want to see more of this. I think the concept is awesome and your writing is great too. So, keep up the great work! I can't wait for the next update! I just hope that this story isn't dead, because that would be a shame.

This is actually really good. Shame you're continuing it.

please update! this is really good

you really need to uptadate man

The story is quite good and very original, but what would be nice is that you could use simpler words and make the chapters somewhat longer, the rest is perfect

wow, simply your story is magnificent and has a lot of creativity and potential, I hope the continuec why or if I will not continue it: D

Interesting

Please update, this is a really good idea.

great story and please update soon and are you going to make annabeth a boy cause i want to see that and and are you going to make someone else from the future ?

A great start to a story. The only advice I could give you is going forward, try not to follow canon too closely, and continue taking the story in a new direction.

Please update

It is awesome, and I hope you continue.

Seems really good please update soon.