It really does feel awesome, I have waited a while to get back to this story.. please continue!

excellent chapter

It's an OK story. I've read about half way through it already. I'm Going to Give you constructive criticism and then tell you wgaf you have done good.

The story moves a little fast paced. I mean somehow the Romans already know about the greens which shouldn't be the case so you skipped a lot there. He instantly walks in and becomes the hero. No time for him to settle or anything it's just all there which doesn't flow great.

However your actual writing is good. As in the spelling grammar and all that is very good your paragraphs are a good length. Maybe a few to many skips if you get me. Swapping povs a lot can be annoying so maybe cut them down a little but other than that your writing is very good the rest will come with experience.

Good stody, like it alot, keep updating please and make a sexy scene or two (or 5) .

Perfect and update soon please

nice

Glad to see an update!

Excited to see Percy back in the story too!

Oh man, you have so much going on at once. I don’t know if that’s a good thing or a bad thing. On the plus side, it creates the foundation for a complex and compelling conflict. On the downside, progress overall will be slow as each plot thread takes up limited chapter space.

I can’t really complain much about the story other than hoping there was more Artemis-Percy interactions to develop their friendship.

I think making a weapon of power, Ocean’s Wrath, a central plot point makes sense. A weapon of power was required to take down Gaia in original myth as well as Kronos. It makes sense that Percy would require a weapon of power to take down Pontus as well. I’m excited to see the full extent of the power of Ocean’s Wrath as well as its origins. Is this perhaps connected to foreshadowed plot thread you had earlier of Percy musing if demigods were born able to become stronger than gods or something else?

I really look forward to the next chapter!

Interesting development with the aspects!

good chapter

Pontus really the single most peaceful and second most secluded of the primordials is a wrathful dick. Who mind you just randomly wants to destroy Olympus cause reasons.

"Artemis..." said the king of Olympus. "You need a guardian of the hunt..."

or something like that.

Just let us know when you're done.

nice

i love the story so far but could you slow down a bit when writing the chapter because when i read it, it changes subject really quickly like when percy met reyna there was no introduction just follow me. so could you please slow it down and add reasons behind everything. thanks keep up the good work im loving this so far