Is Goku gonna check if his son is okay, or...?

Come on... Come on... FINISH IT!

That was soooo cute!

Review, author! or I cannot write more!

Write more or I'll use a special beam* cannon on yo arse.

*Special Beam Cannom: You know that really cool spinny atack Piccolo does that killed Raddiz and Goku.

Damn!

While this story would obviously require some knowledge of the characters beforehand, the dialouge is pure comedy gold. Marron and Goten have no idea how to handle this, and since they're kids, everyone sees the spectacle as cute and laughable! I bet it would be a whole other story if these two were teenagers (/me thinks of evil plot)

The only bad thing I could think of is that sometimes the characters seem to just pop into existence, as if on cue. A good example of this is in ch. 5, in which various characters not mentioned before quip about the relationship. Ok, maybe it's not THAT bad, but it did seem a bit sudden. The characters mentioned earlier had joined in the story more smoothly, though.

Keep up the good work, Darkmatter. You have the talent to split our pathetic sides. :)

That is so cute! Like, really, really, really cute! Like, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really cute! Like-

Vegeta: YOU CAN SHUT THE HELL UP NOW!

Okay, fine then, Veggie-head *sticks tongue out* I will! Anyways, that's so cute! Wittle Goten and teeny weensy Marron! Aw, that's so cute! Like, really, really, really-

Vegeta: SHUT UP!

Okay, I'll shut up ... *sniffles and blinks* anyways, you must write one with Trunks and Pan, PLEASE!

Oh, by the way, I added ya to my favourites' list.

Keep up the good work! And the cuteness! x

lol! Nice AOL sn!

This fic just proves you learn somethin' new everyday! I didn't know such a show existed! This is cute...just reiterateon things ad take your time when you write. You're killing it's potiential my friend with these short hurried chapters! Just food for thought, anyhow I'm a shameess oportunist so check out my Gundam fics and my DBZ fic A Sayain's Worth! Well see ya round kiddo!

I love this!

GOTIE!

"Yeah, sure thing, Daffy!"

GotenFloten?

*raises eyebrow*

Are you alright? Any injuries to the head, been playing rugby lately? O.o ? o.O GotenFloten? Hilarious! GotenFloten! I personally prefer Gotie, but GotenFloten ... hah ... priceless ... *shakes head in disbelief*

Goten's seven? XD Heh ... wouldn't it be hilarious if you wrote a lemon about GotenFloten and Marronnut? _ Okay, okay, don't write a lemon 'bout lil' kids ... heh ... but it was an original idea, wasn't it?

I'm mad ... three people accused me of ripping off Mistress BlackOpal's 'Heartbreaker' just because my new story's called, 'Confessions of a Heartbreaker' Trunks/Pan no doubt ... *sighs* Well ... I must go and mope now ... please update real son, alright?

GotenFloten? LOL! Gotie is cute though _

Hiya! This chappie was so cute! Goten's got a girlfriend! Yay! Now . how bout getting Majin Buu a girlfriend too? Just kidding, but seriously, this was a real great chapter .

But ya' have to write a Trunks/Pan real soon! Kay? ~

AW! Goten has a girlfriend _ How cute! And you updated fast too.

AW! This is so cute!