I am so sorry for Severus. Sigh.

Have you never heard of shorter sentences? Maybe if you made your sentences a bit shorter, I mean not so many words that the reader begins to lose interest, but leave out some of the unnecessary commas, some of the unnecessary descriptions which really don't add to the story but then again maybe the amount of words you use just boost up your word count, then maybe this story might be a lot better, but then again it might not, oh well! 67 words in that sentence and do you get my drift? Or maybe there were a few more

Very good story.

You, your, yours, you're...PLEASE learn the difference.
they, they're, their, theirs, there's...PLEASE learn the difference.

Wizengamot is the correct spelling.

The story was very good, but the continuous, repetitive, simple grammar mistakes detracted from your narrative.

Thanks for writing, keep trying to improve.

okay harrys punishment wasa bit harsh and too much

Very awesome! I love this story. Although you make me want to kick James in the ass lol. Looking forward to the next part:)

I have enjoyed this you for sharing it with us. I look forward to reading the remainder of your series.

I enjoyed reading your story. A suggestion: Keep an eye on "were" vs "we're" and "your" vs "you're" and "there," "their," and "they're." It's easy to confuse these words because they sound alike, but they have different meanings and using them correctly would elevate your writing.

Heyyyyyy,

I really liked your fanfiction! I really would like to translate it into french. Would you agree to let me translate it? I will be happy if I have your permission.

Sihssy

Nothing touched on why Harry was losing his cool so easily; was that the influence of Voldemort's shade?

It's an OK start. The plot is weak around the premise to abandon hero because there's no sensible reason that Harry wouldn't have been trained alongside his brother. Unless there is nefarious agenda afoot. Feels too forced for the poor James and Charles relationship. Harry didn't seem to have any meaningful impact in year 1 beyond showing up to deus ex the troll. He probably could have used his own adventure to keep things interesting. The relationship with Daphne could be rushed but it's sweet to read. Your writing styles biggest flaw is the clinical dialogues and listings. Dialogue sometimes feels like.. 'I'm going to see Harry', 'Ok go to Harry', 'Harry I came to you', 'You came to see me?'... Listing issue is like when you inform reader of pointless details like the exact school schedule and a listing all presents. Hopefully you find this critique helpful. Thank you for posting.

Another WBWL story where Harry is just abandoned by his parents, which is the epitome of OOCness. Never understood this plot device. Makes no sense.

harry putting someone in the hospital for calling you name harry crazy.

ron was not being a bully, he was complain to his best friend, that different.

ron calling harry a name, and harry think it is ok to put him in the hospital, harry has some problems. ps harry been calling ron name so should he attack harry.

but ron did help save the school, he does deserve it, so again you wrong.