This is suppose to be a story not a play. Try to rethink your writing style before you post something else. There is a reason you don't see stories written like this.

I'm supporting this before it gets famooousss!
Truly though this is dope

Please update as soon as you can. I've been trying to find stories with Marley in it. You're story is one of those few. I like the structure of you're story btw