Update? Or abandoned

Well, your writing has greatly improved but...grammar. I suggest you practice the tenses, it's a bit confusing...

I just had to snicker at the image of Neith going ballistic over the loss of her snacks. I like how things are developing so far and am looking forward as to how you'd develop the characters and maintain the delightful touch of humor. I'd love to see how this would play out and what twists you'd put in

Nice... g

Oh good...I thought this was going to turn into one of those things where two characters get trapped in a small space and they say: "You know what? Let's smash."

By the way, there's some small little grammatical and sentence errors that just poke at me, sorry to point it out. But other's have too, so I figured I would? Pretty comfortable story though.

Good story. Well other than some grammar issues,it's nice 4/5.(Man, if i was your beta reader it'll be crazy.)

I love your aresxnemesis fics.

Interesting concept. There are a few grammar flaws that detract from the flow of the story, but otherwise it is fine. I am looking forward to what Apollo will do to get inspiration for his literary endeavour.