I gotta say, that was a compelling first chapter. The gradual unveiling of Asasaki felt natural and kept my interest. And it's always good to see Bro Klein being an important character instead of getting shafted for a harem girl.

Hello! I’d like to start off with I loved reading everything so far and seeing the lack of errors. I’d like to keep seeing the lack of errors in spelling and such so I’m going to point out a spelling I spotted. A bit before midway the chapter, at the part where Asasaki talks about her old friend, dying is misspelled as “dieing.” Hope this helps, cheers!

I should've reviewed sooner but I was too caught up in the story. I'm really enjoying it so far. Glad to see someone focusing on the other characters for once. I also like your OC so far. She seems to fit in pretty well so far and I can't wait to see how her friendship with the others progresses

I am loving this story so far. Klein is one of my favorite characters.
So glad I choose this as the first SAO fanfic that I ever read.

im not sure what direction the story goes to-with the focus on the NPC's...

OK, so far this isn’t half bad. The writing and details are good, the emotion is there, and there’s the fact you’re not afraid to make a story that is NOT a canon rehash. I’m keeping an eye on this.

nice chapter. the part about almost killing siix kids in a forest-i think it is a bit too opaque, and should be written more clearly, or clarified in dialogue. Did the man mean the danger she put the black cats in by agravating the nenpets?

Kibao here was interesting, and i was honestly hoping for some insight into his character, some development of him...

mice chapter.
do the guys here experiance a similar thing to what kirito and asuna did with the elves and Kizmel?

Will there be such scenario hidden on every floor?

This was nice, but why did none of furinkazan mention as Ninja Girl expected them to?

Is Mitsui like Kizmel? will Asuna and Kirito meet Kizmel in your story?

Nice chapter.
as always klein and kirito are cute-particularly going on about asuna

over all interesting story.
the contrast between asasaki and the canon characters-kirito, asuna and klein, etc are interesting. particular her interaction with kirito.

i also like how she is mostly with Klein's group and not kirito, and doesnt end up replacing the beater or 'stealing his limelight'. both fit in without either losing their importance. The changes brought to kirito from their interactions are nice touch.

I do look forward for more.

Good chapter and flow

Pretty good story you got going. Definitely is something new to me, and like the pace it's going. Can't wait for the next chapter.

I really enjoy the story so far. I look forward to the next chapter!