Dumbass writer

Percy's being too much of a dick.
He's basically a short-tempered, over-protective, dicky asshole.
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I mean, why go so rutheless on a baby 200 year old hunter?!

Look at me now Dealing with power I will tear into your flesh

This is an interesting however I would have had a different ending. Either having percy die and finally find peace, him kill the fates when they finally show up in front of him on Olympus or him becoming a primordial (whilst having Zoe join him) and finally escaping the cursed, controlling fates

Also, the way you have based this story, it feels like you could have made it a bit harder for Percy to let go of his grudges against the Hunt. Also, you shouldn’t have made it a PerZoe story. It doesn’t work with the amount that he is supposed to hate the Hunt

I wasn’t a huge fan of how before, Percy was OP, and then he was barely able to take down Hyperion. Other than that? It was pretty good

One complaint, old English isn’t just modern English with the yous replaces with thous there are other differences

Silena said Percy instead of Tyler when Tyler said we are going to hold Manhattan

This story is beautiful
Legitimately the first story to make me shed a tear in 5 years

can you make a sequel?

This made me cry it was different in a unique very amazing way thank you for creating this

The only thing that would have made that letter better is if at the end Percy said f*** you artimis

anyone else think that Percy's longbow should've just transported back to him like his other weapons?

Percy is really UNDERPOWERED. especially since you keep saying just how much power he has. its annoying when people do this with OP character, they make them underpowered compared to what they say is his powers are. Percy should not be afraid of the Olympians moving him away form his friends and trying to kill him if he is so powerful!

I've spent three days reading this and I'm only on chapter 13. The storyline is good, but it should be broken up a bit more. It is starting to really drag and get boring.

The pairings fit the storyline (Perzoë), but by writing this way you are trashing some of our favorite characters from the series and focusing on some characters that don't really fit (i.e. Jennifer and Tyler). If you are going to add in OCs don't make them seem unimportant or portray them as static characters. Percy seems very OP, but Tyler just doesn't seem to even compare even though as a Son of Poseidon he should be somewhat powerful. Jennifer seems very boring. If she were actually a sister you think there would be more interaction between them. She also seems to only play a role so that there is another POV who is always questioning Percy.

Btw it would also help if you broke up your dialogue. Congrats on the dedication though. I doubt I could write a story this long and keep it entertaining this long.