Hi! I'm happy you decided to follow my advice, this chapter was much easier to read this way!
At the beginning I was very angry at Gray so I'm happy you decided to reveal why he is behaving this way. Now I understand his reasoning but still I don't think he should treat Juvia that way, he is really hurting her. He ignored her for a lot of years and even then she still loves him, I think she deserves at least an explanation. Maybe when he will know about her engagement to Lyon (can't wait for that part) he will change his mind.
See you next time!

I didn't feel any emotion from this chapter it just felt like just words on a piece of paper. I was extremely annoyed with Juvia she takes advantage of those who truly care for her not caring the emotional strain put on them. Yeah kinda didn't blame Gray for kicking her to the kerb, someone who takes a lashing and comes back for more are stupid.

Hi there.

I really, really like this story. I really do. But there are so many errors that it's quite difficult to read. I think that your first problem is construction. It is really an eyesore. You should remember to seperate the story into paragraphs. Please.

And remember that when people talk it should be seperated into paragraphs. For example:

"Don't look!" Lucy squealed as she turned around. Her breathing was heavy and her heart was drumming painfully in her chest. She knew that he was right there.

"I'm not," Natsu's answer came in a shrug as he turned around. "You've fought too much with me and I won't look. I promise."

"Thank you," her whisper came as she continued to put her dress on; "and please close the door when you exit."

"Okay!" Natsu quickly closed the door as he dashed into her living room where Happy was enjoying a fish.

It's quite simple really. And, in addition, you should remember to seperate paragraphs into topics. One can be about Natsu eating a fish. Another can be about him getting up and begging Lucy for more food. It's just easier to read.

This review is not to insult you. Really it isn't. I just want to help you better your writing and that's the only reason I'm even reviewing. It's to help you. Not to insult you - please understand that!

Other than that your story is quite interesting. I love the concept of childhood friendship, and I'm really interested in why Gray changed so drastically. Juvia's history is also quite interesting and I really cannot wait for the next chapter. I want to know what happens. I want to see whether Gray will change his attitude towards Juvia and why he will do it.

Happy writing!

This story is pretty intriguing. Even more so now that Lyon will enter the picture. I'm a bit angry at Gray for what he is doing, I just hope that he has a reason for behaving like that! I feel so sorry for Juvia, I hope she will get better soon!
If I can give you an advice, you should try to separate the narration from the dialogues. It would be a lot easier to read it that way!

She was warned...oh well she is a trusting idiot. Amelia better not show pity or concern, I wouldn't I would say I told you so. Anyway is that the end of the story, usually writers give up after the damage has been done and then give a rushed ending when it comes to forgiveness and comfort.