Fuck, but I love this... The narration is a mix of Harry Dresden, without the Tony Stark-like cultural references and... I dunno who, but I love this.
Also great stuff on the Mind Magics there, haven't come across many fics that explore the potential of those; it's great, man!

It was pretty good ! I hope you'll continue i really liked your explenations about magic and all :D

I really like your writing style, hope you continue this story!

Hope to read more soon.

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love the story so far, please make it a HarryJohn- 118 pairing, I can just imagine Cortana absolutely fangirling over it, and I feel John really needs someone in his life

This looks like fun. I love the crazy explorer vib you have going on.

Awesome story. Kind of different with all the science, both magic and mass effect, but I loved it. Really hope you continue this. Keep up the good work.
-M4RKL4R.

Excellent story.

AWESOME tale...what happens next?

Going to need more.

Is the time effect one way? Or what?

Definitely more please

really looking forward to seeing more of this fic, the moon really makes me think of avatar lol. hope to see more soon.

LM13

ok... I like the concept and the harry as you portaied him is rather fun. HOWEVER this whole chapter is sooooooooooooo boring! No human interaction, no dialogue, no real action told as it happends, just diary after diary after diary. I will bookmark this story but I can tell you right now. if the next chapter is like this you will have lost me. I skipped over large parts of this chapter as it is.

Amazing! I look forward to more.

This is Great! I look forward to reading more! I love the use of Alchemy in this too, it and Onmyodo are my favorite magic systems. With the way you are writing the use of alchemy in this story I guessing there is both some FMA and Nasuverse influence, right? oh well either way its still a great story and its SLASH TOO! That makes me happy also if it counts for anything my vote is for Vega/ Harry and I totally agree that Kaidan and Male Shepard are soulmates. Well I have said my bit so again good job, keep it up!

Wow, great style and great plot so far ... overall a brilliantly paced and well-built introduction.
There were a few missing or doubled words but nothing a bit of beta*ing won't fix.
Even though I'm not a fan of slash I think I will keep reading to see where you take this.