I definitely think with whatever next story you do you gotta get a bit more cohesive in how you explain things as so far its been all over the place and I have almost no clue what has been happening.

This story is really good, too bad it got dropped, I'll still follow and favorite, this story is Worth it.

Jnk

mas shirou mas shirou

sabes que un marmol de realidad no puede transladarse cierto ademas shirou es literalmente espada en forma humana nada puede superar eso

This story is a mess, you need to pick a scene and stick with it. It's like your jumping days every few paragraphs.

i got trolled...

So much originality to the story, as well as a new personality to Serafall makes for an incredible story. I look forward to future chapters.

This story is confusing as all hell.

This chapter sends shivers through my spine. It’s amazing!

This is pretty good. With a very slight touch-up on grammar/word choice, this is very good!

Also yeah, might wanna drop the whole Sora chapter. Kinda random and filler-like.

Extremely disjointed but still enjoyable. Although I skipped most of the chapter about Shirou's son. Whole flashback chapter was a bit tiring.

Hilariously? According to a type-moon collaborative manga where characters visit an onsen, both Shiki & Shirou are apparently canonicaly hung like 'Eroge Protags'.

*canon has derailed so much

This is one of the most fun stories I have read. Canon has derailed that I'm giggling like a little girl. Way better than what I can do. Though you might want to slow down the escalation.
It will be hard to match it in later parts of the story if you dont, and can cause you to write yourself into a corner. Followed and fave'd mate/