Please continue your story I love.
Espero que hables español me gusto tu historia es fascinante y ya quiero ver que sigue con Erick y Harry después de toda la situación con ser herederos por hablar con serpientes y como sigue la relación entre Severus y Lily ...

Hmm. I've kind of wondered before about an abusive-Potters WBWL terrified that, if they were found out, they would be maltreated as badly as Harry. Interesting take.

Plus, since Rose is a girl, she probably would do even worse around a James this psychopathic. I worry about Fleur and Gabrielle.

Well, this James is an out-and-out psychopath.

One thing I've never understood -

Shape is often characterized as hating James for "taking Lily". In pro-Snape stories, though, there's a plausible alternative explanation for why he has a severe kneejerk reaction to James x Lily.

Lily rapidly went from loathing James to "giving him a chance". Why? 'Because he reformed his behavior' is the canon explanation... yet he was still going after Snape behind her back. So he hadn't changed that much. From Snape's perspective nothing changed at all, and, assuming he was no longer on speaking terms with Lily, he had no good reason to know James was putting on a reformed act in front of Lily.

So Snape sees Lily abruptly reverse her opinion on James Potter for no apparent reason. Huh. Why might people, in a magical context, suddenly fall for people they previously vocally detested?

Especially after NEWT Potions taught them all how to brew Amortentia?

Now, that doesn't have to be the actual explanation - but, for the purpose of characterizing Snape, all that matters is that it might look terrifyingly plausible from the perspective of a man who would put nothing past James Potter.

I've given increasing thought to writing a variant on Snape in which his guilt over Lily and hatred of James is tied less to her death and James's bullying, and more to his secret fear that he watched his former best friend be drugged and raped, and failed to realize in time to stop it. Whether or not it's true doesn't matter - only whether Snape has come to suspect it.

What I don't understand is why, in a fandom so pervaded with Weasley love-potion plots, there are so few Love-Potioneer Marauders. I would think it would be popular in James-bashing fics, yet I haven't run across it.

Anyone reviewing who says 'Lily would never let this happen' is blissfully oblivious to how abuse develops. I suppose the author could have spent longer lingering over James's descent from charming young husband to shameless abuser, but that's enough content for an entire story by itself.

The common justification in more-detailed stories is that, all fiery redheadedness aside, James is a wealthy aristocrat and Lily is from the Wizarding world's underclass. If an abusive James was GENEROUS, she'd make it out of her divorce disgraced, blackballed, and without custody of her children. If he held a grudge, she'd find herself likely as not in an early grave. It's not her decision whether she "lets" this happen, merely how much she can limit the damage.

Sorry. Power disparities, and the harsh realities thereof, are an obsession of mine.

(I dislike Lily x James because it has the unpleasant message of 'If a girl you've obsessed over for years has repeatedly and unmistakably told both you and her confidants that she loathes you, NEVER give up! Just keep at it until she caves!' Thus, while I don't think the canon pairing was abusive, stories in which AU!James abuses Lily have always had a strange verisimilitude. All it would take would be for canon!James to be nothing more than a mask - which is less anti-canon lunacy in the Potterverse than it would be in more forthright canons. After all, that's exactly the in-universe truth of that OTHER heroic, hyper-charismatic Head Boy - Mr. T.M. Riddle.)

I like this chapter. It is a good chapter. Please update soon.

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I like this chapter. It is a good chapter. Please update soon.

Just checking, but this story now shows as complete and it really doesn't seem to be.

Love your story. Can’t wait for an update. When do you update, do you have a schedule? Please update soon

I really liked your story! It was an interesting plot and fun ideas, I especially liked the idea of Snape adobting the twins.
I have read several of your author notes and it is clear in your story that you have problems writing, maybe you should have two betas. In the future, you should consider not using so much space commenting on critique points, it will disrupt the reading for many others who would enjoy your story but are then forced to read your words, obviously written in anger and hurt.
Especially the one chapter where you wrote it in the middle of the chapter, it really disrupted a peaceful reading and I considered stopping there, but I read on, because it is a good story.
Please leave your computer for about an hour after reading critical reviews and before uploading a new chapter, you will have a much clearer head. Do not let the haters get to you! No one is perfect!
Again, good story! Good job!

I like this chapter. It is a good chapter. Please update soon.

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I understand that you have a learning disability, and this makes it harder for correcting SPaG errors, you can get a beta, as I typed earlier. And if people complain so much, that means there is something to complain about. Reviews serve that purpose, to let you know what's wrong so you can correct it. I could recommend some, if you like.
The plot is good, but has a few holes, which can also be remedied by brainstorming with someone else. (Maybe a beta? Your friends?) A new person brings new ideas!
Secondly, I agree. The review shouldn't merely contain complaints, and I apologise for doing so in the previous one. Here are the things I like about your story: The flow is brilliant, your plot is good despite a few holes, I like the way your characters interact and good job on Harry getting a girlfriend to date!

Your plot isn't bad, but has some holes in it. Lily would never give up her wand in the first place. She would fight tooth and nail for it. We know that Lily was quite talented, and would have put up a good fight against James, long enough to escape, at the very least. Maybe even win.
Even Sirius and Remus wouldn't keep quiet for long, plus what is veritaserum for? Yes it would be hard, but they could struggle through it.
You also have a lot of spelling and grammar errors, and I suggest that you ask someone to beta your story, and try to fill in the plot holes.