My problem with this is that it’s an introduction to a lot of new characters and none of them are remotely likable. Shion, comes off as a brash, brat who is rude and though she shows a bit of care with Naruto my overall first impression of her isn’t good. You would think with a reincarnation whose past life was riddled with ailments she would appreciate life more and be less of an asshole. Tsukasa doesn’t come off great either. I read the authors note and I guess she’s part of another story where I assume you took the time to develop her character, but that isn’t shown here. I know it’s still early in this fic so I’m willing to read a bit more, but I just think you should always remember your audience. Assume they haven’t read your other stories, and ask yourself if you were a first time reader, would you like the way these characters are being portrayed thus far?

Update yay!

This chapter is all messed up.

this is really good

Love this chapter, can't wait to read the next chapter.

I like her spirit! I hope her relationship with Shikamaru and her teammates gets developed more. Just to let you know, she would be a Cancer since Leo starts on July 23. I would know since that's my birthday. :-)

do ninjas get acne?

I can't wait to see how the next chapter will turn out. I still need to read your other stories, but I like my more positive MC.

my birthday is July 22!

Your story is very good thus far! Keep up the good work, I really enjoy your writing style.

The way you go about connecting your stories is.. interesting. I've not really seen anyone do this before, so I would like to see how it goes. Great story, hope to see a chapter on this story in perticular come soon. Till then, ja ne