I enjoyed the chapter. I would have liked a little more connection between her and Thorin. And have a scene where everyone comes to greet her and tell her how glad they are to see her awake and doing better.

The writing was very strong. I can really see improvement in your writing and story telling.

Hhm, yes l think l understand an elf calling a Dwarf a Jackal..

Thank you for a very enjoyable story.

Really liked the chapter, particularly the ending. And I think it would have been helpful to put the translations of what was said in Sindarin and Khuzdul in parenthesis within the document instead of holding that off until the end. I was curious as to what they said.
I'm enjoying this story.

Teresa Reasor

Gah! You always leave me wanting more! I look forward to Ashara awakening and the eventual explanation as to why that "very foolish, rarely attempted, and even more rarely successful" thing actually worked.

Wow! Lots of action and I loved the ending. Very good chapter and having Ashara and Thorin injured was a very good move. Really liked the chapter.
Teresa

oh my god! this chapter was the best one so far. I loved the battle scene and the ending! WOW. really really great chapter

Oh, Ashara, what have you gone and done now? Besides the swordsman's sin of putting a dirty blade into its scabbard...

I see you mixed Sindarin and Quenya for sister mine, hehehe.

Good stuff here. Now to wait for the next chapter to find out just what the heck Ashara has done that Soren didn't want her to.

Excellent battle. And you just kept upping the stakes which was really good. Lots of action. and the pacing was really good. Just like the battle.

Oh boy, Thorin is going to explode, for sure. Ashara is taking a great risk.
Look who is here. Soren, the missing ranger. I'm curious about his role in your plot.
Until next time!
E

Hide and seek with a dragon? Was that foolishly spectacular or rather spectacularly foolish? I am of two minds about it. Now the dragon was let loose and out for revenge. Bard better be ready. That's all I'm saying.
See you next time!
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Poor Ashara. I feel sorry for her. Not only did she lose her mother in terrible circumstances but now she had to suffer being cold, wet and covered with fish. Kili's comment was spot on. ;)
I like the scene with Dwarves and the toilet. Tilda's words make me smile every time.
Until next time!
E

Really entertaining, ha ha. I wonder when Ashara and Thorin start to realise the truth about their feelings. And I would really love to know more about the swords.
See you next time!
E

I hate spiders, too. Horrid creatures.
Legolas knows Ashara? Interesting.
See you next time!
E

A great chapter! Bombur's runing always makes me laugh, ha ha. And I love Beorn.
Thorin was lucky Ashara didn't give him a black eye.
I know Russian a bit and your plot idea concerning Orcrist and Lightbringer seems to be really interesting. ;)
Until next time!
E