hmmm i have read at 42 chapter's and find this is a good stories and creative but sometimes in the story was so slow movement and full of drama, less action. in this story Sasuke should have proposed Hinata and not just being 'boyfriend', i know that's maybe for a story but it's kinda boring but still can make me want to read. maybe you should correct the grammar and use more jutsu name and more action. thanks for make an interesting story.

loved most of the story, but hated the ending with Sasuke seemingly talking to Temari for nothing and not ever actually marrrying Hinata. I also quickly got tired of reading about Hinata with Akuma when we all know she would escape eventually, it added nothing to the story in my opinion. I probably was expecting a cheesy ending, but trying to read through that Akuma part literally made me skip to the final chapter. The actual ending of the story was disappointing because it seemed that they did all that work to not end up together.

Is English not your first language? The writring is really,really,really bad. Grammar wise, it is impossible to keep up with what you are syaing. And when I can understand what you are trying to convey, it doesn't make any sense why someone would even say that. You need a proofreader and a beta to keep this hot mess of a story on track. This story isn't very unique, everyine has done a plot like this. But somehow you found a way to make it so so so boring. This is not a slow burn, just bad writing. Why waste time on 58 chapters of trash when you can write shorter stuff and get it proofread to make sense?

Hinata's book on Sasuke's mannerisms is a very smart idea. She'll be able to read him better thanks to her notes. Surprised I never thought of that. They're starting to get used to each other and their interactions are entertaining. Looks like we're going to meet the Taka. I wonder why Sasuke didn't mention Karin. I hope she's gets introduced later. I still wonder why they're going to Kumo, the people who tried to steal the byakugan, of all places. I would've preferred Ame.

It took a murder attempt to finally open Hinata's eyes to the gravity of the situation. The Uchiha will always be feared and hated. If something were to happen to Naruto, there will be no one left who can oppose a mangekyo sharingan Uchiha. Hinata, by choosing to carry the next generation of the Uchiha, just painted a target on her back. In a world of uncertainty, the most unlikely choice, Sasuke, may be her best chance at staying alive.

So Sasuke had feelings for Forehead. Seems ooc since he was going to leave Konoha for the Sound without saying goodbye to anyone. Sasuke wanting pink haired Uchiha children also sounds weird. The thought alone disgusts me. I had a feeling he knew about Hinata's pregnancy through Naruto. I understand why he'd lie about it but I don't agree with it. She's going to make a stink about it when he finally comes clean.

Come on Hinata, how gullible are you? You honestly think a clan that enslaves half it's members or punishes those who break inter clan rules will just welcome your one night stand Uchiha love child with open arms? You're already aware of the Uchiha's might from the war, and no doubt the Hyuga elders are as well, you don't think they'll brand your son, who already shows promise by being an Uchiha, as a means of having the Uchiha serve the Hyuga? Your son will be the branch family of the branch family.

Ino's speech reflects my thoughts on Hinata. Not moving on from Naruto is a disaster waiting to happen. Even though Ino was harsh in her delivery, it needed to be done or Hinata will dismiss the point she's trying to get across. It seems Hinata still hasn't moved on. Didn't expect her to. She'll only move on after Sasuke shows her affection. Glad the kid will have a sharingan. I hope Sasuke crashes the Hyuga Estate and announces his son. That'll be mad entertaining.

The beginning of this chapter is the scenario I was talking about last chapter. Somehow, someway Naruto and Hinata ended up alone and she's permanently in heat around him. If he gave her an inch he can kiss his marriage goodbye. It feels like she doesn't care about her friends as long as she's satisfied. Makes me wonder how much she would sacrifice for him. Her sister? The Hyuga? Konoha? At least Sasuke's here to claim his kid. Now things will get interesting. Hinata's dilemma, while realistic and well done, was a bore.

Ino really fed it to Hinata and I'm glad she did. Hinata needs to wake up. The more she continues to love Naruto, the more she puts herself in a position to ruin his marriage. You just know they're going to end up alone someday, not by choice but circumstances like a get together, and Hinata can't control herself around him. She's still having fantasies of him despite him being married. I hope we never see Keisuke again. Unless he's important to the plot later, all he did was slow this chapter down. That exchange between Hiashi and Hinata was entertaining. I hope her baby has the Sharingan just so I can see Hiashi shit a brick.

I'm glad Ino supports Hinata. Ino's a good friend but a damn gossip. That part where Naruto waved at Forehead but Hinata thought he was waving at her was hilarious. It'd suck to get caught in that situation. Time to come back to reality Hinata. You will always be invisible to Naruto. It sucks but it's life. You live, you learn. You can't force someone to like you.

Interesting concept. Sasuke's a dick but I can see him act like this. After all, now that he's not motivated by revenge why wouldn't he take advantage of his looks, that every girl falls head over heels for, and become a poon slayer? It sucks for Hinata to be treated like shit, and judging by the blood on her thigh, he really pummeled her, but he'll come around. She is carrying his second goal after all.

Ok so... I FINALLY finished the book after trying to read it THREE times. I always got close to half way but I finally pushed through and finished. I was good but also very different from anything I have ever read, like there was so much information to take in. Like ur brain is so BIG and creative for coming up with a story like this, like WOW.

I wish you continued it in the second part! I am dying for that proposal now.. Gosh,Sasuke,man up a little!

I really don't want to offend you but your story was really tedious to read. I'm currently on chapter 9 and I don't think I could continue reading this. Gomenasai!