Neat! Always cool to see fresh ideas about magical tactics.

This is awesome. I just read it all at once and can't wait for more. I hope that you continue.

This story is actually very interesting! Really, I quite like it. Your writing skills are supurb. :) Cosider writing a real book and publishing it. I think you could do it, easily. Its a shame that this story is going so unnoticed. Sometimes, when a story is too "different" from the cannon arc, people shy away from it. There is, if course, some reason to that. New is strange and people here are looking for familiar. However, I think your story is brilliant and deserves a lot for credit than it's recieving. Well done!