Reviews for Naruto : How To Be A Hokage
Naruto4ever2000 chapter 1 . 12/19/2019
Hi first time reading it so pretty please update.
arinasution5 chapter 3 . 1/8/2018
Can you make naruto have a monkey animal call?
I want to see him succeed using that call
KitsuneAlex chapter 3 . 9/8/2017
I love it soo much continue the good work
Kitsune chapter 1 . 4/21/2017
it be AWESOME plz post another chapter
Louis Romero chapter 1 . 4/20/2017
I love it I can't wait to read how Asuma and Hiruzen are going to train him and I can't wait to read on how Asuma introduces Naruto to Kurenai and how he deals with the Akatski that are after Naruto and Kakashi Hatake in his lack of training his team and playing favorites towards Sauske and how he reacts to Sauske nearly killing Naruto when he leaves to join Orochimaru and when Kisame and Itachi come to get Naruto I can't wait to read chapter 2 please update real soon
Genocideshinobi chapter 2 . 4/22/2017
Cool story. Seems like I inspired the name.
Work on the dialogue, too short. Not much information is given. I look forward to your next chapter
Novrier chapter 1 . 4/21/2017
Umm, the idea of Naruto be raised by the Sarutobi family is nice, I like it and it does make sense for something like this to happen. So yeah, the idea itself is very nice.
The first chapter ... well, not bad. There are a few things that could be improved though. First of all it is a bit short. For a prologue that is not much of an issue, but later chapters need to be bigger, at least 4 times bigger. And I don't mean you have to drag them out. You need to expand the content and make it more details.
Actually details, or more exactly the lacks of those is the main issue. For example the scene between Asuma and Hiruzen discussing the matter and making a decision regarding adoption would be very welcome. The dialogue could use some work, because the mood is constantly shifting and even though I can understand who is speaking it is not exactly made very clear how a character is speaking and that can make a hell of a difference.
But all of those can be improved with some work and overall all of the above is not really crippling to the story.
The biggest problem for me was ... the first line. Yeah, nearly dropped it right there. Why? Easy, because of the angry mob cliche. Ugh, that one is so overused and so ... stupid (sorry) that it actually hurts. I could perhaps understand Naruto being chased after a prank by several ninjas, that did happen. But here, he just stumbled upon people who decided to chase him. Umm, why would they do that? Because he is a jinshuuriki? That makes no sense at all. Please, avoid cliches and overused ideas, don't over glorify some characters and don't degrade other. That is not interesting, that will just be overused and to a degree boring.
This story has amazing potential, but will require much work.
Dante3142 chapter 1 . 4/21/2017
Not bad it has a good start to it. I look forward to more chapters.