Regarding Bella's mother, I'm not sure which mistake you're referring to as you said you've already fixed it but I am a bit confused about her. Bella mentioned Renee in the very first chapter but then a few chapters later Jasper said there was no information on Bella's mother so he assumed she was dead and then last chapter or the one before Jasper said Renee is alive and with Phil.

I feel like this story went from being American to being English within the past two chapters lol. Suddenly Edward and Bella are both using the English words for items (whisker hamper, cupboard, pyjamas, lorry) and eating food such as game pie! I'm assuming the author must be English, because I'm sure it was said somewhere in the beginning this took place in Chicago, America... right? Now I'm a little unsure lol. Regardless, I'm enjoying this story! I love how feisty and strong-willed this version of Bella is. I dont read Mobwards often but when I do I dont like seeing weak Bellas that just give in to everything Edward says. I'm a big fan of this so far! Cant wait to see what happens next!

I love this story.. I. just can't believe how nit picky people are. It's your story not theirs. It's usually is guest readers who complain. Please ignore them. I like that Edward is a hard ass in public but living to Bella in private.

our emotionally-stunted Edward can be smooth after all

"I tried to reign myself in" It's REIN. Think about using a horse's reins to control it. REIGN means to rule over a country. A monarch reigns supreme.

It's "YOU'RE safe now," not "YOUR safe now." YOU'RE is the contraction for YOU ARE. YOUR is a possessive pronoun. ("YOU'RE going to lose YOUR keys if YOU'RE not careful.")

It's "a severe talking TO," not "a severe talking TOO." TOO means only "very" or "also."

Since she lives in the US, she attaches the device to a truck, not a lorry.

Good story

I really liked this story. Sad it’s over!

Interesting story- I couldn’t stop reading

I so loved it that I didn’t want it to end! It’s written splendidly. The story telling was captivating. I wish for more. Thank you for writing this story! Bravo!

I really enjoyed reading this story again and happy it is still on Twilight FanFiction. Thank you for your time
and writing. It's fun to go back and reread your stories.

Wow! I don't know how I missed this story for so long, but it is fantastic!

What. Great story! I hope to read more from you!