Un Fantástico Comienzo!
Un Poco Rápido, Pero Encantador!

Ok im giving my complete opinion, I loved this story, the only person i dont like is millicent bulstrode, i mean honestly can anyone see her and harry getting together, but then again it is Fanfiction .ok now that i have given my opinion i have a request , Can you continue this story but make harry sign a marriage contract between him and Astoria!? Please!

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The story is good but your nichnaming sense is shit

I would love to see what you write next. Your a great writer and your stories are great too. Keep up your great works of art.

Thank you and Please,

Terri

I have really enjoyed this story so far but this chapter I cant help but raise a plot related objection. I Daphne actually cares for Harry how could she possibly make such a public scene with him where she with her sisters aid drags him back into the great hall to publicly disgrace him with some of whom wish him dead. If they were not at war and this was a time of peace I could possibly understand. This however is not the case and Daphne should know this. And this makes this scene almost an act of hatred as it publicly disgraces him and makes him vulnerable in front of his enemies for what is a minor transgression. I am sorry but while such behavior may be understood and forgiven in a time of peace. Daphne as a Slytherin should absolutely know better in a time of war. In lumens terms she painted a missive target on Harry's very life and placed a bounty on it. Obviously the author of this fanfic failed to consider some things such as how war changes things. what is acceptable behavior during war is not necessary appropriate for peace and vice versa. I am sorry but at a time of war publicly humiliating a leader of one side is an act of war and a public declaration that they are siding against that side in the war. So basically Daphne also publicly declair Harry as her enemy. Sorry about this review ut I don't care how much the two care about each other this kind of behavior in a time of war just can not be tolerated

When will there be more chapters

I really would like to see you write a follow up story to this one

Hopes of a new chapter...dashed. While I think it is great you are going into self-publication. I feel like this plea should have been included in an actual new chapter. Looking forward to the upcoming chapter. May check out the book. I am not sure yet.

Great story so far. Love how Harry went from having nothing and no loving family to having a huge family. The greengrass time could be an interesting one. No doubt both parents are in agreement that Harry is the right choice for Daphne, although something else may come up too. Astoria may be smitten by Harry as well and wants to be his consort, it wouldn't surprise me, just like with Luna suddenly popping up and wanting him too. Now I'm thinking of how powerful Harry can be and (this is me thinking) destroying the Horcrux inside of him using old magic, in this case, forming a coven. If he has enough witches bonded to him it could work, but he'll have to fully bond to them. Looking up on powerful numbers (7 being the most powerful followed by 13, etc), the power Voldemort knows not of. It's love alright, but not just the emotion, but the power, the magic, the life essence, it brings. That could be more interesting. Anyway, if you want any extra ideas you can pm me, my mind works in mysterious ways (plus I read too many fan fictions lol)

I'm about to buy it keep it up and I'm gonna look at the others

I will read your book on Amazon Kindle and spread the word. I love this fanfiction you are writing!

well written

Are you still doing this story? I love it

More please?