Hi. Thanks for an interesting story. Just a heads up ch 4 has some formatting stuff in the chapter as well as the story. It's kinda hard to explain. It's like the format choices (like arial and the font-size) is written in word format throughout the whole chapter. Have a great day.

Really like this story, but this chapter might need to be reloaded? Seems all funky.
Other then that wonderful story.

I'm really beginning to love this story! I know it's been a little while since your last update, but I truly hope that you will continue to write chapters for this story. I really look forward to seeing Carrie's relationship with Marco and the Whitebeard pirates develop and grow stronger as she get to know them and they get to know and understand her.

Nice

Hmm, thinking about it, pinapple is my favorite fruit too. Lol. This is a really interesting fic, I'm rather excited to see where you take it. And I love how the premise is something that I wouldn't even blink at in the One Piece world. It almost makes MORE sense than any subtle introduction could. Only advice I'd have is the whole "Narrator POV" vs "Carrie POV" thing. I mean, I change perspectives all the time, there's no issue with that. But it kind of breaks the fourth wall when you label the Narrator as a perspective? Especially with the tense you're writing in. Technically you're just going from first to third person, and the italics let us know it's a flashback, you didn't really introduce a narrator character to act as an omniscient storyteller, so it feels out of place?
Really you never need to announce the POV unless you plan on staying in first person and jumping back-and-forth between different characters. But, that's really just stylistic, not that important. And the fic is really well written and interesting, which is what should (of course) take priority. Anyway, great fic, can't wait for an update ;)

This is awesome

AAAAAAAAHHHH I LOVE IT! Its well written, not too fast paced, and good dialogue! I love how you portray marco!it feels so natural. Keep up the great work
Kudos
James

I LIKE WHERE THIS IS GOING! IM EXCITED!