| Reviews for The champion of Great Red |
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Borello chapter 3 . 1/26 the story sound interesting. i hoped to read more chapter. |
chris009 chapter 1 . 8/26/2017 1 4 10 |
CompuBob chapter 2 . 5/24/2017 Correct your punctuation please; or at least try to do so. First letter of the sentence should be capitalized...There's so many cases where it wasn't. Repetition of same phrases are a no-go. TBH, I haven't suggested anyone should rewrite a story; but this one deserves another read through before you regret what you are planning to do. |
SHADOWNINJAMASTER chapter 3 . 5/17/2017 Awesome chapter keep it up |
Guest chapter 3 . 5/13/2017 super |
The Rupture chapter 3 . 5/13/2017 Give Decomposition And Regrowth Magic Of Tatsuya Shiba that'll make a set Destruction Creation then Restoration or Give Accelerators vector change then Tatsuya Decomposition you get manipulation creation and destruction |
god of all chapter 3 . 5/12/2017 Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon. |
Kintama77 chapter 3 . 5/12/2017 At the beginning of the chapter, you say you'll reveal the first two powers, but actually, you only reveal one. Why must you do this!? Jokes aside, this a very interesting story so far. For the powers, I think that Photographic Memory, Magic Aptitude, and Magic Circle Comprehension would fit him best, since there isn't much mention of the 'Brain Power' serum after the into, I believe it should have a greater role in his powers. For the same reason, Ittou Shura could work as well, with him having the ability to remove the mental restraints from his body, for a short amount of time. Other than that, though, keep it up! Also, side note, I think you would do great with a beta reader. There are a couple of issues, like formatting, and a bit of spelling, but you're definitely getting better. I'm just saying that it just makes the story a little easier on the eyes of the reader. *cough*hitmeup*cough* |
AJGuardian chapter 1 . 5/11/2017 I can't help but notice that you used "angle" in stead if "angel". What's your angle, hmmm? Was this just an honest error in your part? Or is it for nefarious purposes? Need to keep an eye on this one if they can't spell "angel" correctly. |
Guest chapter 3 . 5/11/2017 For the harem number 3 serafall. |
RikuKage chapter 1 . 5/11/2017 For the Harem Serafall and ophis. For the powers number 1 and number 3 |
Gundam Meister Uzumaki chapter 3 . 5/11/2017 dimensional travel and Matsu's (from sekirei) ability to control virtually any electronic devices. |
Guest chapter 1 . 5/11/2017 dragon that what i say |
darkdiablo chapter 3 . 5/11/2017 Hello, make his hair like the Uzumaki |
pastor chapter 2 . 5/8/2017 Gamer power with strategy games like company of heroes, command and conquer, supreme Commander, halo wars. |