Liam is so boring, just like Jacob and Vega. basic bros, useless.

To start with I rarely or never comment on a story, but this is an absolute perfect example of studying and perfecting characters. Mass Effect Andromeda hasn't even been out for a whole month (as of this moment) and you, Blablover5, have somehow managed to perfectly nail the personalities of all the Tempest crew. I have read fan fictions of other popular franchises that couldn't accurately portray it's characters as quickly as this. Now, are there more epic and long running fanfics, maybe, but that's not what I'm praising here, it's the characters, and I don't think many can argue how well you did in this aspect. Keep up this kind of quality and I will support you every step of the way.

P.S. I 'am in no way considered a "critique" so...just FYI.

This was really good. Loved how you kept Jaal in character

HAHAHAHA! Jumping on the bed, that is BRILLIANT!

This was so adorable, you captured each character's personality very well. It all seemed very easy, and flowed very well.
Fantastic Job!

Love it! Very cute and fluffy! Nice break from all the shit they go through.